I have dancing feet
that give me heat
so i went down the street
and this guy name pete
give me a treat
and that was so sweet
so im ready for everyone to get beaten
A contest entry
- "celebrate, celebrate, dance to the music!" round 1 of 4 by iamthebeatles.
650 points, ended February 5, 44 entries
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Absolutely cute, once again
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this is cute
it should say he gave me a treat
then it would make more sense
other wise I understand what your message is
work on adding more details so lines are longer with same word at end that rhymes
hey your young , you have a good start.
it is hard to rhyme every line so that is a good beginning
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You gave this poem a song like beat that one can dance too. Clever! Great job, thanks for entering and good luck.
cassie -
very good
i like this short and sweet and to the point great job .
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lol..simple, sweet, and of course its going to ryhme its by lisa ..i love reading your poems cause they always make me laugh..thanks and keep writing plz
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hey! i noticed your page because my name is lisa too lol,
great poem! i like how it rhymes
keep on writing!
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nice work it all rhymes (unlike my poems) but awesome keep it up
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