Love lasts through out the ages
and doesn't end in death.
Though flesh and clothes
should fade away
leaving only a skeleton frame!
Proof remains:
Eternal love's kept safe.
Author notes
1st picture: http://suphafly.deviantart.com/art/Waiting-too-Long-for-some-Love-87667213
to the contest holder thank you for the challenge and the very best of luck in judging this contest 
Well the poem speaks for itself commentors 
Special thanks to Ryno for proof reading my poem and helping me out alot. as always Lil Bro I am forever grateful & also thank you for the title
A contest entry
- May I Prompt You? XIII - Pain of Love by Manda Kathryn.
1000 points, ended January 14, 2009, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments welcome!
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What a great poem. So passionate and pure. Love is one of the few things tnat transcends death and is immortal. Great take on the prompt. An amazing piece of writing, as I have come to expect from you. Perfect flow and great use of metaphor and imagery. Great job. Keep it up.
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Ooh, neato! Loved this one so short
and sweet and simple, yet holds so
much meaning. Well-composed
thoughts portrayed here.
This is yet another amazing
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Great stuff!!!
Impressive!!!
So much expressed so beautifully in so few words with a delightfully dark undertone that makes for a thoughtful, contemplative read that captivates throughout with a love that trancends the ages & walks in eternity...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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This is a very sweet piece, but it was also saddening. Truthful, to boot. Great write here. Keep up the good work and thanks so much for sharing!!!
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
Profound;
I really enjoy the profound feel of this though it is short it says so much in itself
Beautiful and honest
♥
Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Paulie, you've given the pic a voice that carries through the dust of ages, wonderfully done
one little suggestion on your summation:
"Proof remaining of the
eternal love kept safe"
using the root of verbs when possible is stronger, and articles are not always needed. In this instance, less gives a clearer image, perhaps
'Proof remains:
Eternal love's kept safe'
but it's just a thought
Best wishes!
love and blessings, Sandi
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a good write but descirbes the pic a lil too much its a good thing i know who ur r mainly talking about in this poem to make it so heart felt. those r the best kinds of poems as know gl in the contest my friend
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Excellent write my dear friend, I couldn't have stated it better, pen on in faith, love always your Aussie Pal Josie
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Excellent!
I enjoyed this my dear brother, your feelings come shinning through with the given prompt beautifully as you describe your thoughts on this poetic page for all to read. Thanks for sharing you bro, and all the best within the contest!
Peace, bro Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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My comment is as it was in MSN. You know what I think.
One more thing: I would add some sort of punctuation at the end of skeleton frame. And capitalize proof. It may make the transition better.
Well done! You know what I think.
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