She believed in perfection
and creation of the divine
.
She became
a mere shadow
blending into society
of glossy magazine covers
promoting death
by conformity
.
Today, I visited her grave
Author notes
30 words
Prompt~ Option 3 ~ Split-personality by nodate at deviantart.com
AP won't let me link the picture properly, says when I paste the link in the external link has already been used. I think it's a bug, I will try again later
A contest entry
- 13/30/30 Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
1200 points, ended January 14, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is a very powerful & deep poem.. the images that you've painted with your words is excellent. don't worry about the link, it seems that happened a lot that day... it was probably a bug...
such a harsh truth within this piece, one that I feel has a strong message.
excellent take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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How deep and creative...a sad look at today's society and what we have done to so many...we are so broken...wonderful as always...something so very relatable...
Best,
mystic
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very well done . . so expressive . . best of luck in the contest !!
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This is such a sad reflection of today's society. You p[enned this mdeeply and amazingly.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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She is the cure for Etheiopia, spreading anorexia to devour starvation.
She is the yardstick real women must stand against. She infects other women with insecurity. -
Speaking of the line " becamea " it needs a space there. It's not all one word.
Beautiful imagery here. I love the direction that you took it in. You do it a lot of justice. Well penned. I find myself fumbling along, wanting to know what happens next. Usually that's hard to do. Regardless, nice job and keep on writing my dear poet friend! -
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Thanks hun, AP is messing around with my formatting, each time I make a change, it takes all my line breaks out. It's driving me crazy!!! Thanks for picking it up for me
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Yes..what a universal image of the life is sketched here with the mature pening of yours..well done..and thanks for the sharing..
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A great take on the prompt.
I really like the line....
"She became a mere shadow"
It says so much within this write.
well done.
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What a great take on the prompt... brilliantly done.
Ken
Might want to check spacing... a few words run together...
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Stunning ~
I love the raw honesty feel of this write; there is so much truth within and I absolutely adore the final line
Wonderfully penned hun
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
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Excellent
Awesome write, pretty good take on the prompt.
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