Daddies aren't supposed to die.
This gravestone has to be a lie.
But, I can't find him anywhere,
empty is his easy chair.
Daddy's smile is sorely missed.
Don't remember last he kissed
his "little girl" whom he did love.
Is he in paradise above?
Daddies aren't supposed to die.
My heart is shattered as I cry.
A contest entry
- Desolation or Consolation by Rheea.
1000 points, ended January 10, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I'd like some feedback.
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cute!
i have a poem about my father dying as well! lol and i do agree daddies rnt supossed to die! awesome write!
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awwww...
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Wow.
This is a wonderful write. My heart would literally break if my dad died. I love the emotion in this piece. The denial in this write makes it that much stronger and more heart breaking.
"Don't remember last he kissed
his "little girl" whom he did love.
Daddies aren't supposed to die.
My heart is shattered as I cry."
Very powerful words.
Amazing job.
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that was very good but sad!
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this is sad to read today. the rhyme is pretty good and i thank you for sharing this with me today. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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This was a great read, I enjoyed every line of it. It's so sad. The first two lines are really powerful they really drew me into the poem
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You did an excellent job. This really was powerful and wonderful. Thank you for writing.
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Powerful. Very veyr powerful. Wya to make the reader relate to the poem. The flow it good and the rhyming adds to it. Good job.
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awww daM THT IS SAD
IS IT A TRU POEM ABOUT IT -
Awww... This is a wonderful write... I really enjoyed it... So SAD yes so thought provoking... i dont think that is spelt right what meh... I really enjoyed reading this. I have had friends who have lost their loved ones and have been left with nothing. Its hard!! thank you for penning this write! Keep it up poet!!
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oh this is so touching, very sad and has left me thinking about my dad.
it paints such sad imagery, a beautifully sad poem
thanks for the thoughts x
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I feel the same about my daddy!!!!!
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Really good job. Sounds really heartfelt and has a steady, nice beat. Good rhyme. This is sad, but so sweet! Fantastic.
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This is beautiful.....and so true....Daddies aren't supposed to die..."but I can't find him anywhere, empty is his easy chair.." you can just feel the little girl looking all over for her dad! It's like that for the big girls too....
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gentle poem..
nice easy flowing poem full of the little girls pain.. without any loud emotion...
And so true.. "Daddies aren't supposed to die."
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beautiful. very sweet and touching.
i like your rhyme scheme as well.
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This is most beautiful. No matter how old we are when our Dad dies he is stilly our Daddy. I miss my Dad a lot, even though he ha sbeen dead for 18 years it seems like yesterday. This poem was really touching. Thanks for sharing.
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This is beautiful, I know how it hurts to lose your father ... I think.. mine was so much changed by illness I never really had a dad.. I get confused about fathers they make me sad.
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