Vespers sung from parched throats hasten the darkening of the skies
Laments rise soothing inducing melancholy dreams that will expire
Reverant silence welcomes tired and weary souls back into the fold
Invariably, from this sedateness emanates a gale the weary cannot elude
For their searching souls are on peregrination, aching to find peace
Ghostly entities wander through realms only kindred souls find solace in
The hope for like-minded and search of a home drives restless minds
Into these shades of grey where photophobic creatures feel acquainted
Though falsehoods run rampant and roughshod over tombs of abandonment
Time tells the tales thus wrought like a litany against ordained despair
Immuring the viscuss torment that seeps through the chinks of fortitude
Which inexorable leaks to drip and hit the footing of the trestle yclept soul
The detriment it consigns ravages the anima by leaving ghastly seams
To claw the existence by its ankles, grab it, shake it, and finally crush it
And in this quietus thus found freedoms opens wide and becomes more than real
Drifting into this iridescent nebula lurking beyound the end of days
Forlorn figures collide and merge basking in the mirrors' confusing light
Transfixed by the promise of companionship and the virtue of a lingering demise
Author notes
Collaboration poem by Jamie (Ravensdark) and me... 
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A very interesting piece of writing. I like the way you drew the reader in with your first stanza and just kept pulling us along with each new idea that you presented. It's a dark piece, but there is such strength and such power to your words that I am really impressed by how it does not bring the reader down. So many pieces like this are just ultra-sad and gloomy, but you keep this piece lively with you style and your excellent word choices. A few times I felt like you swallowed a Thesarus (which is usually distracting), but at the same time it never felt forced, it flowed really well.
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Haunting!! Thank you.
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I love this entry. Amazing imagery and I felt like I was in it. Great write. I can't wait to read more.
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Good Write!
I didn't read it Fully, but I liked it alot
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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This is a lovely piece. i love it.
The diction is strict...the message is clear
"Time tells the tales"
Your use of personification,imagery and coherent flow of ideas tell the tales more.
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Very well done. Good structure overall and a very good message told throughout. Your wisdom flowed from the pen onto this paper and it shows brilliantly. Keep up the good work.
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EXCELLENT THIS IS A TRULY FANTABULOUS PIECE!!!!!! I love the way that you wrote this!!!! What a write!!!! You portrayed this so beautifully!!!
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This is a really impressive poem, almost scholarly with brilliant use of language. I didn't get "viscuss torment" but thought it might be an unfamiliar vernacular.
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