I stepped on the ground without you.
Forced to live a life without you.
Had to breathe without your help.
It's been days since I had slept.
Lying awake thinking what had gone wrong.
So Im writing a melancholy song.
A life without you is not a life at all.
Heaven so high but I'm doom to fall.
Author notes
This is writing for this contest. Hi, Ap name is Vietbabe909
A contest entry
- "celebrate, celebrate, dance to the music!" round 1 of 4 by iamthebeatles.
650 points, ended February 5, 2009, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hiya....tell me what you think please...
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I think a lot of people could connect with a poem such as yours. The last line is my favorite and i must say I an a sucker for heroic couplets. My only issue, which an opinion that u have the right to ignore, would be the word slept at the end of the first quatrain because it is more of a slant rhyme then a dead on type rhyme, so it through me off, but no biggie.
cassie
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