Touched by the finger of you, my goddess;
my lust for love ignites within
erecting my manhood, only desiring you.
Bringing forth passion ne’er seen,
setting my soul ablaze;
You, are the one that I adore.
The Queen, who holds my heart.
To taste but a drop of your succulent essence;
I would give but my life.
You hold the elixir of life within;
I long to taste its pure form.
Your milky mocha eyes, pierce my being.
Staring, I lose myself in your awe.
Laying on your back, I caress your every curve;
tracing ever so gently, my hands shake with excitement.
With every kiss, every touch, you moan with pleasure;
teasing me of euphoric sensations next to come.
You begin to trace my lips with your fingers;
I suck on them ever so lightly, you groan,
and my soul melts, as my heart beats only for you.
Wet, with imagination, knowing what is next to come.
Throwing me on my back, you mount your servant.
Carefully, I slowly penetrate you, my heart ever so pounding;
you gasp for air, the sensation you feel within you, me.
Our souls IGNITE and unite together as one.
Sweat beads off our heated bodies, entwined in our whirlwind of love,
together, we reach our heightened state of Euphoria.
Slowly, our passions subside, cuddling, caressing;
Until the dawning of our new day…
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A contest entry
- Bottle of Emotions Undone. by My Last Breath.x.
950 points, ended January 20, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What is one thing that stood out in this poem?
Comments
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Wonderful
great imagery in this piece very sensual.... great job....Your milky mocha eyes, pierce my being.
Staring, I lose myself in your awe.
Laying on your back, I caress your every curve;
tracing ever so gently, my hands shake with excitement.
I really enjoyed the imagery here....
PKO
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wow this is a good one i like it
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This is by far the best sensual/love/erotic poem I have ever read! Your amazing talent for words and putting them together to create something magical is so intriguing to me and you keep my interest all the time. Whoever will be with you will be one of the luckiest girls in the world my dear. Each poem I read by you makes me want to know you more and more. Well done
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Glorious
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haha I wouldn't go that far by any means... I was just having a good day when this was brought to. Thank you for your kind words, I am blessed and glad that you enjoyed this piece! Thank you so very much.
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now isn't that how it is supposed to be... hot, sexy with tenderness. love the word gasp! almost makes me do that each time.
and a gold! congrats
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Congratulations on the golden chalice!!
I love this romantic love poem in all its gentle pureness... Your muse really has a novel way with words, dear Poet!! 
I see you have quite a following of loyal fans gathered here - 
With such an impressive write, I can see why!! 
Keep it flowing... Peace & hugs, Cyn xx 
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can we say ~Steamy~
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HOLY SHIT!
Well someone's hot! no further comment...
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ha ha Breathe!
Thank you glad you enjoyed this piece.
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A very beautiful seductively written poem. Congratulations on your gold trophy which is not a surprise. WOW.
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Thank you for that, sorry so long to return the compliment. I'm glad that you enjoyed this piece.
Aaron
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beautiful-
I held my breath through this poem to the point that my chest felt hollow. I found myself sighing at the end of this poem...it's so amazingly wonderful. Beautiful write.
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Extremely sensual and gorgeous!
WOW......that was amazing...I could feel the anticipation, the urge, the excitement, the heat, the wetness, the passion and desire....hot hot!!!
Hats-off to the author!
GRACY
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Oh my goodness... This is smokin hot!
and so sweet internally...
Delila
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That was, interesting. Tasteful. Nice. .... Servant was an interesting twist. Domination. Hmmm. And I like the line that say "the sensation you within you, me" that was classic, I havent ever heard it put that way and it was sensual without being cut and dry. If it was such a publicized poem I would suggest more content, given your obvious talent with tasteful description, but bravo non the less.
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What do you mean that it was a publicized poem? more content....how would you suggest doing that? Hit me up
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WOW
Ummm yah ok..I think I will go take a cold shower now! This is sexuality at its best... I know I write quite a bit on the subject... But the y way you have with words mixed with the sexuality of the words...WOW! Perfectly Wonderful! xoxo Miranda
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*faints C
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this is so beautiful! im like YesterdaysDreams, dont usually read erotic writes but this was pretty gorgeous. so emotional and passionate... but yeah, not vulgar, just loving.awesome stuff!
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Well thank you, I've only written 3 "erotic/sensual" writes in 23 years...and I prefer to write from a lovers standpoint than writing "dirty" or vulgar. I'm really glad you enjoyed this piece.
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ok .. so I typically dont read erotic writes, what can I say I embarrass easily. This was beautiful, not vulgar and porn style .. it seemed an intimate loving moment
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I do the best that I can to write from "love's side" or point of view...I write to share my deepest feelings about my lover or how I feel for her, it's more than just sex or anything like that, it's the feeling of being completed by another person and how that person really makes you feel. I'm like you I embarass easly when it comes to the sensual write and have only written 3 of them in my entire life which is ok... it's something new and something more reserved for my future wife I am blessed to have the experience in writing these to get an idea and flow and feeling and other peoples opinions on it. Thank you again for the wonderful comment and sorry it took me so long to respond and comment back, and sorry for the length lol
Aaron
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Judge's Ruling.
Well.. You definatly got my pants interested!
This is an amazing poem. Not pornographic, but not understated either. I could definatly feel the emotion.. The passion being felt. I can tell that you somewhat let go of your thoughts for a moment, closed your eyes, and embraced the image of the idea, writing what you see.
This is what I was looking for.
Good luck in the contest.
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oh goodness...haha don't even know how to respond to that one... Thank you!
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this is an amazing poem, my fav. by far. There is so much imagery, all in all its amazing. Good luck in the contest
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this is an amazingly vivid and beautifully written poem, the imagery is awsome, be very proud!!
good luck in the contest!
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I loved it
Yay lol!! You have such a talent for imagery.However dont take this the wrong way but this one seemed a little bit more forced.It was a different feel not neccarily bad but different. Overall Ioved it like all your poetry.Very sensual and real. Keep onwritng.
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Wow this is just wonderful. Your imagery is perfect, not too over the top but beautifully sensual.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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Oh wow this is just beyond amazing walks out of the comment box hopefully I do not run into anything lol
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This is amazing. The imagery is sensitive, and full of passion that drives everyone to imagine the very things you speak of.
I am a bit iffy on the use of "chocolate mocha" because that's what mocha is. Chocolate flavoured coffee. I think "milky mocha" might work better?
A great write. One could only wish for someone to write such for them
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I'm trying to find a beautiful way to describe brown eyes...lol so maybe just take out the "mocha" and use "chocolate brown eyes" ? just leave it kind of simple? what do you think?
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I know you were talking to her but I have a suggestion to go and use something a little bit metaphoric.An example being "panes of grain" "earth remains glazed upon the looking glass" or to stick with your original "mocha of the crystal glass"
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Milky mocha is a like milk chocolate.
Mocha can be quite dark, but with a lot of milk quite light
I love the mocha use, try it with milky nad see how you like it
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Okie Dokie Milky Mocha is what it shall be for now!
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Wow this is an amazing poem. it's a beautiful poem that's very sensual. the imagery is excellent and vivid.
You did a wonderful job with this.
good luck
kat
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amazing imagery and very very sensual...makes one shiver with anticipation...awesome write...good luck jenn
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Thanks Jenn...I was trying to make it full of emotion and passion but not "dirty" or "pornographic" I hope that I was able to do that and that it ascertained itself to your senses and imagination painting a wonderful picture...
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Beautiful work with some amazing imagery
and passion here. I love the title that you
chose for this. Fits the entire write very
well. I am sure that you will do well with
this entry and wish you all the best with it!
Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep up the
wonderful work here my friend!
Jeremy0826
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