you know, i used to be a dreamer,
before you let me down.
i used to dream a lot,
of ball gowns and tiaras
and kissing prince charming in the rain
and holding your hand.
but i don’t believe in fairy tales anymore,
and i don’t believe in the day i was born.
but when i’m stoned i can fly.
that’s one dream that i make come true.
so fifteen flights of stairs later,
new york city sits below me.
you’re walking down a street down there,
quickly because you’re probably late
with a caramel latte warming your hand
and that black and white checkered scarf
tight around your neck.
i want to strangle you with that fxcking scarf.
you’re probably squinting because of the wind,
it’s crisp and bites at me through my clothes.
so i take a deep breath,
similar to the one i took
right before you first kissed me
and turned my world upside down.
you never let me fly.
i want to fly.
so i jump to finally grow my wings.
and you keep walking.
Author notes
username: a s h l e y .
prompt: suicide
i
swear
to
god
one
of
these
days
i'm
going
to
ing
jump.
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Comments
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I liked this.. these lines are gonna be stuck in my head lol
"but i don’t believe in fairy tales anymore,
and i don’t believe in the day i was born.
but when i’m stoned i can fly.
that’s one dream that i make come true."
Great Write and
Thank You for entering
Good Luck
-♥Amanda♥
ohh and btw don't Jump!!!!
Your too good at writing
just get stoned
Lol anyway really good write -
Please, for the love of hope, do not jump, on one of these days or one of those. Life is amazing a terrible trap of pain and suffering and hurt, but thats the beauty of it all. That is not all there is to life, there is also hope, and kindness, and TIME. I have not lived an easy life, it grows harder by the day, but i have hope that tomorrow will be better, and today is good. becuase a good today makes a better tomorrow. Had to comment on that first, being as ive felt that many times before. Now for the poem, well written, strong meaning nice phrasing and imagery. Keep up the good work.
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I love this write. So inspiriational.
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thanks :]
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I really liked this write. I like how when you are describing him walking you describe him knowing the small details about him like what coffee he drinks, that he's late, and the way he squints. Then i also liked the lines
"but when i’m stoned i can fly.
that’s one dream that i make come true."
but then i think I wrongly associated it with these lines
"you never let me fly.
i want to fly.
so i jump to finally grow my wings.
and you keep walking."
until i read some of the comments.
well anyways i loved this write is was interesting and beautiful. thank you for entering
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I love the title, it's amusing so it pulled me in right away. I know I shouldn't judge a book by its cover as they say. As in this case a poem should not be judged entirely by its title, but I half expected something cheesy and childish after seeing the title. The poem itself was a pleasing suprise, it exudes the hurt and sadness, while the title pulls the reader in originally. Very nice,
Kechara
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OMG this is awsome, enough said..........
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great write and i chuckeld with the line
i want to strangle you with that fucking scarf lol
you draw a great picture of imagery within the poem, dont bother jumping though cos he aint worth it!!
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Great write. Good luck in my contest.
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I like this and I love the ending! You picked a great title to! Good luck to you in the contest
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i really like the ending, love.
this is good[:
and scarves suck...
is this about your asian? -
I agree this is a truly great poem.
I love the honesty
i surely hope you don't take the leap either.
my favorite line had to be this one.
i want to strangle you with that fucking scarf.
it is filled with such pure emotion and honesty and even a very bit of deep anger and hatred.
The whole poem is great and i loved it keep up the great writing.
Fire
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Holy Moses! What a great poem. It gave me chills. Even the author's notes were powerful. I hope you don't take that leap, babe.
The last line kicked my butt...
"so i take a deep breath,
similar to the one i took
right before you first kissed me
and turned my world upside down.
you never let me fly.
i want to fly.
so i jump to finally grow my wings.
and you keep walking."
dang, that was raw. And goooooood.
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