Foundations laid
with promises made
two hearts
beating as one
then you went away
without a word
yet...
my heart can't say goodbye
today you are now an angel,
among the stars.
i know those promises
are still the foundation
of the love we shared,
and will carry me through
till the day i am with you...
my eyes weep from the memories
yet my heart...
... my heart can't say goodbye
it will forever carry the love
that we found.
Author notes
Ask me no questions, I will tell you no lies...
A contest entry
- the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 362 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very interesting author notes you have there. But on to the poem. Wonderful. The ending is just catchy and makes you wonder if things will work out completely. Great job. I thank you for entering the contest. Unfortunately you've already won a trophy and therefore are being removed from the contest because this breaks the rules. Thanks. kahy
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So sad
I once lost someone I loved dearly; he passed away at 34 from complications of diabetes so I do know the feeling of loss and despair
Thank you for sharing this poignant piece; I wish you all the best in your writing endeavors -
you need to spell check and do some editing to this but over all great write.
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Excellent
Oh my this was so touching and well expressed. Congratulations on the honorable mention
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So sad but what a relief to know that you really do have an angel watching over you for those two hearts will always beat as one.
Love,
Amera♥
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Lovely
A tale of sadness sweetly rendered to create compassion for the author. Well done.
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Don't say goodbye, if it isn't in your heart to do so.
I never believed in the word myself.
Goodbye is too final, and love never ends.
Carry it in your heart, until the day you meet
your love again.
Love this one Twinsy
Joyce
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Precious~
Oooooooooooooooh My Word~ this is a Beauty of a piece penned and touches deep~ Swells the eyes Beautiful
The images tug at the Heartstrings~
Loss can be hard to deal with~ I know from what
I experienced- I remind myself- it is the physical shell- that is gone-
Powerful this is ~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Ya know Mom, If I were to ever lose Carrie, like you lost Tim, I am sure this is exactly what I would be feeling. Another great Poem.
Justin -
Tissue alert indeed honey!
Yet another loving masterpiece from your pen. You have such a wonderful ability to convey so much emotion through your words, to make a reader really feel each and every line....
Beautiful.
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What a heart breakingly beautiful poem. I loved it. It reminds me of one of my favorite songs, ´The Love He Left Behind´ by Chely Wright. Thanks for sharing.
God Bless. Larkbird -
Beautiful
Yes indeed tears forming honey and the embrace of such love strengthens us for we know in time we shall meet again
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