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[ Madness blisters ]

Madness blisters
Across the bark
The writhering
Echos the mania
The dome cannot
Contain mutters
That bounce into
Stone windows
But escapes not
Into a full breath
But reverberates
Into the frame
The oscillating of

Whispers do not

Give a sense of

Peaceful wisdom

It incites dissent

And the animus

Is what blows 

Out the eyeballs

And this is what
Life has become

A contest entry

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  • The.poet.of.hearts
    January 31
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    you have done good with your Junoon, I'm admired, Wow, less people took part in my contest, but they have done great, and you also did pretty nice,
    I'm feeling your words inside me
    and sorry at that time father has come, so I left only marking, but now your comment in words is here
    Good luck in the contest
    by
    The poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    January 31

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    Theme=4.0
    Idea=6.0
    Emotions=5.5
    Feelings=6.0
    Words=6.5
    Background=5.0
    Title=4.5
    Passion=6.5
    Interest=6.5
    Showing the Junoon=6.0

    Thanks for Entry!
    This is my way to Comment on my contest's Entry
    by
    The poet of hearts and beautiful words