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It Happens at Night

“Whooo has called this meeting tonight”?
His voice cried out to all.
“And Whooo did everyone invite”?
They heard the wise owl call.
His head spun ‘round with eyes aglow,
As if he was watching a show.
His head spun ‘round.
His head spun ‘round.
The restless crowd began to grow.

“The magic happens every night.”
The tiger answered him.
The owl smiled in delight.
That tiger was so prim.
We heard the fox make his remark:
“The cages open after dark.”
We heard the fox.
We heard the fox.
“The doors fly open with a spark!”

The scene is quite a spectacle, 
Only happens at night!
Animals are respectable
And no one acts contrite.
The magic here is known to few,
When the animals know what to do.
The magic here.
The magic here.
Each mystical night at the zoo.

 

 

 

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Author notes

Trijan Refrain:
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    February 3
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    Amera,

    You could write about anything, and make it good.
    I really like this.
    Joe


  • Peripatetic gold member
    January 23

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    This is quite a lyrical form, it almost begs to be set to music!
    Beyond the rhythm and rhyme of the form's conventions, the author has once again delivered a poem with delightful, imaginative content to inspire a smile and visions of the afterhours society in the zoo. It brought to mind T.S. Eliot and his cats.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 23

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    I commented on this before being asked to be co-judge-for-form but I'll just add here that it meets the formal requirements perfectly.


  • artis
    January 13

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    wouldn't it be nice if they were free to roam in their favorite elelment, the night,

    not beleagured by nebby nosed tourists, handlers and feeders, just long stretches of empty concrete and wooded ravines to run through, fly through, and fountains to wallow in. That sounds like the way it should be.~~Artis


  • Desire gold member
    January 11

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    Precious~

    Oh My Word children would adore this piece- what a play on words Beautiful!! Woot
    Excellent form as always

    Okies me ready to read again


    Keep that quill dancing!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Pure Thought silver member
    January 9
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    You never cease to entertain and delight the reader with perfect form and well chosen words.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 9

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    ha!!! You definitely know my style and my likes! Well done. I totally love this. Thanks for entering my contest! I'm honored!


  • doolie gold member
    January 9

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    Wow. This is really cute and very creative. Whooo, from the owl, I just love it. Good luck in the contest. Looks like a winner to me.

  • jadeangyal
    January 9
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    This could be a cute little children's book. Thanks for exposing me to yet another awesome form!

    Jade


  • RedAquarius
    January 9

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    Cute, reminds me of when I was a child and I thought imaginary beasts would come to my room each night and throw a party! This is delightful and would fit perfectly in a child's poetry reader!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    January 9

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    Bravo

    An excellent poem and great form as well.
    This is a delightful Trijan Refrain
    Very fun to read
    I'm always in awe of your talented quill*sigh*
    I've had a lot on my mind lately but I need to get back into writing form poetry more often.
    You are indeed an inspiration to us all
    Much love and many blessings

    David


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 9

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    A wonderful poem that the contest hostess and any child, whatever their age would absolutely love.

    You seem to do the form so effortlessly...well done.

    Love
    Sue


  • paulcreates silver member
    January 9

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    A playful poem indeed. It reminds me of our zoo here in Denver. They have all sorts of animated light displays during the holidays that turn the zoo into a magical place.
    Great work.

    Paul

  • Sis you have the most imaginative and creative writes!!!! This is truly very magnificent!!!!!!! You did a truly wonderfully perfect job with this piece!!!!!!! I love it!!!!! Your imagery is truly beautiful!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!! I love you soooo much!!!!! This is very very very well portrayed and written!!!!! ur details and descriptions are amazing!!!!!!


  • melphleg gold member
    January 9

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    That was cute. Reminds me a bit of Madagascar I think children would delight in the magical tale you've spun.


  • StarEyes
    January 9

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    What a great job on this one! I love the stories you tell with this form! But this one, for me is the best so far! I am a huge animal lover, and the fox... one of my favorites!

    Best of luck in this contest Sis!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Cup-a-Joe
    January 9
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    amera,

    I will meet you ther tonight at 12:30.
    Joe


  • Azgar
    January 9
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    The form has certainly added to this poem


  • Faeryn
    January 9

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    Wonderful! And a delight to read! I love this form and you write so well. The Zoo is indeed a magical place.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Tirrell
    January 9
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    A beautiful poem, and very intreaging form, this is a fun little poem to read,

  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 9
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    Beautiful form with content perfectly targeted at the judge.

    Great stuff all around, the trijan refrain lends itself to sing song poetry and you hav e exploited that delightfully

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