Listening to a falling rain
Of water in my shower
I let it wash away my pain
As I contemplate for an hour
Water trailing slowly upon me
Beaded droplets travel by
My vision blurred not to see
Water blends with the tears I cry
Rising emotions flare within
Burning fierce and bright
I douse them with rain on skin
Turning emotional day to night
Yet no water will heal the hurt
No sunlight will dry the pain
Only seasons on ageless dirt
Time will allow a life again.
Author notes
As per instruction - the emotion aimed for in this one is sadness.
A contest entry
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Judged-ola!
wonderful piece full of emotion and touches my heart. great flow and imagery too. -
Thank you for including the emotion in the description. You wouldn't believe how many people forgot it. So thank you for entering this was a great poem. One of my favorites definetely. Best of luck!
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an original and good poem, the rhyming could use a little work but i do think this one deserves a second look thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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Oh goodness... This is heartbreakingly sad! I think we all can relate to the pain in this one! What a great job you did on this one!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love my friend
Nyetta
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