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Suicide

S - Sorrow

U - Unloved

I - Ill

C - Coffin

I - Illogical

D - Destroyed

E - End

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  • starving-to-survive
    January 13
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    this is brilliant. I love this ignore the fact that tamburlaine said it was bland and laughable, to be honest sometimes i think more is less. I think it is brilliant how you have managed to express so much hurt, pain and emotion in so few words. I can relate to every singel word, each and every one. I love the way you have laued this out and how you have expressed your self, keep up the good work x


  • aeolia
    January 10

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    this is hilarious! acrostics usually don't work unless you weave what you're saying together with longer phrases, elaboration, and imagery and metaphors. otherwise it just turns out as an elementary, too-simplistic laundry list that any five-year-old could write. 's' is for sorrow! la dee frickin' da! it's so creative and masterful that i'm pissing my pants!

    ...maybe try elaborating and expanding on this so it isn't so bland and laughable.

    • starving-to-survive
      January 13

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      to be honest as far as im concerned...if you dont have something nice to say, or something valuble dont say anything. i find what you said extremly offensive too, and if you think that this is a big joke you are one hell of a shallow and pathetic person (sorry to be so blunt) you have just really upset me that you could say something so disgraseful

      • aeolia
        January 13
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        I don't think suicide itself is hilarious. The rendering of this poem, at least to me, is awkward and thus I found a chuckle in it. But suicide itself? Never.


    • Whispers
      January 12
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      I find it very offensive that you consider something as serious as suicide "hilarious." And actually, acrostics don't always have to be phrases; you can evoke the same emotion and meaning through single words. Even though I appreciate you taking the time to read my work, you don't need to be rude.

  • cindyloo
    January 9

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    You did a great job on this acrostic. You described suicide very well. Suicide destroys so many; the victims and those that love them. I hope you are doing alright.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 9
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    painful..

    to read these words, i hope this is not where you are in your mind my friend..


  • Timeless Wisdom silver member
    January 9

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    A creative acrostic with very true adjetives to describe such a horrid thing that many people sadly fall victim to. Good write

    ~love and light~
    Raymond

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