I was sitting idle,
in soft grass,
with blue yonder above me,
the birds chirped in sweet cacophony,
and the air swayed in just right,
the oxygen sparyed librally from green,
as I began to doze,
In doze without a dose,
I dreamt perfect,
I was a guy with no relation,
no liabilities,
no responsibilities,
no animosities,
no quarrel,
nio figths,
no lights,
no mights,
I had a ready offer,
to be here,
and there,
fill my stomach,
and be late,
I could pick my friends,
and women alike,
nobody hated me,
and I did none,
this was an act of freedom,
I enjoyed it to full,
I began to celeberate a spirit,
that was now free and freer,
doze broke,
I looked at the dial,
wrongly placed was the spoke,
I hurried up,
for my sup,
I might have been freed,
but I was still tied to time creed,
This I still needed to celeberate,
and I did by leading a mundane life that was moderate.
Author notes
This I still needed to celeberate,
and I did by leading a mundane life that was moderate.
A contest entry
- RANDOM! by starving4perfection.
900 points, ended January 21, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Why not
I say the see the glass half full and find all the joy that is life
this is profound and truly lovely
this is when we find freedom
God bless you my friend...
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This was of most interest i loved how you freed yourself for a breif moment in time or in peaceful dreams.
We all need to fly in our sleep to places unknown..its what keeps us going.
A great very intriging write.
mondane? well ...most lives are until we fill our pages with fantasy.
~Lisa~
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Unique and original
Like your style of write I like the last part of the poem really highlighted everything your poem was saying a bit of a chill but thats what makes your poem so unique Made favorite part was...
I might have been freed,
But I was still tied to time creed.
Blessings
Sharon
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Nicely done!
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Its nicely written and theres great imagery there! well done and thank you for entering my contest. =]
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Very nice imagery that you have here. The only thing I see are the aforementioned spelling errors... (which I am sure are nothing more than typos
) Nice job and best of luck to you in the contest 
~Love and Light~
Raymond
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Well done
An interesting picture you paint there. Just to help you out as I see that is what you ask for: On line six it should be 'sprayed' and 'liberally' and line 15 'no' hope that helps
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