Much, is the fast pace of life,
I am a falling stone
echoes fly up to deaf ears
cannot help them,
to make a sun rise
warming cold backs
push it back
Push it back!
The man franticly flails.
a flash is not wanted here
not a spark
next to existence
pales
Leave them not to awaken
to leave a mark
(no word may penetrate their veils)
light the fire and burn the books.
But squint your eyes. Shut them
do not look
The mermaid's song calls
As the she-wolf howls,
the sirens song, is wondrous
and people's laughter.
an ambulance sweeps by
Lovers embrace
a man jumps from windows
flames light up the place
not a sound to them
ears blind
Not a thing to them
eyes deaf
fumbling down a hill
time
a gasp, a cry
a shout
Author notes
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I'm not too fond of the form of this one BUT the imagery sort of blew me away so I'll get over it - particularly loved that opening image of he falling stone
thanks for entering
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I really like the imagery in here. I wasn't expecting the format of it, but it's interesting.
Good luck in the contest.
light the fire and burn the books.
But squint your eyes. Shut them
do not look
I really love this part.
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This intrigues me very much.
And, for some reason, reminds me of the book Fahrenheit 451.
Poignant, charming, and a bit mysterious.
Liked this a lot.
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I liked a lot of the ideas behind this poem and how they were reflected in the words you used. I thought they seemed inspired by actual feelings or experiences and liked a lot of the illusions. I thought this poem was a little too scattered though, too haphazard. The formatting and capitalization you used didn't seem to meaningfully add to the poem and were a distracting throughout the read. Have you thought about using a different style or clarifying your work?
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This is the closest thing to a story I have in a poem. They are not merely ideas, but a sequence of thoughts and metaphorical images describing a situation. There is nothing I haven't capitalized without a reason. As always I am thankful for your comment.
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