fell into airless atmosphere, lungs collapsed
and gold appeared to sing from rays across your face
foreshadowing the imprisonment of your vital organs,
samson's longest locks would never be enough
to get us safely there, we jumped above the limit
faster than speeding bullets aimed for the sky,
rushing back to reality all too soon, bypassing the leaning tower
you claim as your defenses, bricks shattered
like thin sheets of ice under the weight of my emotions,
dripping sap below the surface of watery skin, glowing eyes
spoke truth where echoes would not.
flowers shied away from sunlight that day,
drawing essential rest from the weariness of us
and praying we had enough knowledge to escape.
Author notes
wow.
A contest entry
- not rough in the slightest by Polaja.
850 points, ended January 21, 9 entries
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Any ideas to help me better this?
Comments
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This is an interesting poem - I like the almost science-fiction feel that I get from it
thank you for entering.
Polly
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your style is fantastic, I loved reading this and can only wonder what it is you are talking about exactly.. I loved the line, "rushing back to reality all too soon" that made me smile and somehow made me feel whole for a moment. this is very good, thanks for sharing.
*Lea
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