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I dare not...

I dare not
to write about love
love has never been so kind to me


                                                      but

 

                                                 Oh! how beautiful appeared to be
                                                 my secret thoughts
                                                 to just have a chance to taste
                                                 with you this loving tenderness
                                                 and let it linger upon my lips
                                                 while sacred waters of
                                                  heaven mix forever..
                                                  boundless emotions


                                                                                  fed within...


My heart has fallen in love
but my words 

still appear to be just
scribbles

upon empty pages
from trembling hands
that always
admired resilience...
Yet I sit still
awaiting for his freshness
to fulfill my lips
                                                                                Until then...  


 


 

I am just another prisoner of this world

 

~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    July 24

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    Wow. Wow. This is amazing. That last line was a brutally powerful ending to a beautiful and heartbreaking poem. Congratulations on your silver trophy, can't imagine why it wasn't gold.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • poetryality silver member
    May 11
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    Breathtaking! The concrete form adds so much depth to the poetry. There is love chalked all over this writ! Beautiful! Ever so clever is this poetry. I am nearly at a loss for words and that is a strange feeling for me. LOL Congratulations! A well earned Silver Chalice adorns the beauty of these words.

    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    March 12

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    wow

    This is so amazing like anything you write. I really feel this poem deep in my heart. I allow my life to be ruled by love but sometimes the one true love is so elusive. The one thing most of mankind longs for is oft the hardest to find and hold.


  • Flowergirl
    January 14

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    very nice i love this work and keep it up every emotion fills the room as i read this great piece andi also love the pic very nice touch keep it up.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    January 10
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    Wow congrats! This is poetry at its best!


  • Cannonsfire
    January 10

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    This is wonderful poetry, just builds and builds until that end line blows you away with its power. If english is not your first language, it is unnoticeable here, I loved this, it's a golden moment to me C

    • Amarige
      January 10

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      Thank you so much my friend. your beautiful comments and support means a lot to me
      Amarige


  • thepoetssoul
    January 10

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    This is a beautiful take on the image.
    Wonderfully unique, lovely and poetic.
    Thanks for your entry.

    Tony


  • paulcreates silver member
    January 9

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    I like the layout - you have reservations about the love presented to you, then on the other side you want to love with abandon, you go back to the original side, then conclude in the middle.
    Pretty background too!

    Paul

    • Amarige
      January 9
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      Thank you so much Paul, your comments are always sweet
      Amarige

  • manim
    January 9

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    Beautiful!

    Your feeling show such a tortured soul. My wishes for you are that you experience the deep loving you long for - very soon.

    Your words are so touching. A hug for you...

    • Amarige
      January 9
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      I can't wait to experience it ..Thank you for the sweet comment ..And for the hug your comments means always a lot to me
      Amarige


  • cazzy71
    January 8
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    spiritual and icturesque

    Wow,that came from the heart


  • sunflower.
    January 8

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    It feels old, but the good kind- the 1800s, red lipped, corseted, restrained emotions kind. Like a woman who can't let herself fall- but she did anyway. It's very good.


  • Luciferschild
    January 8

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    a powerful and well written love poem, one that does not fall easilly to cliches or lameness, the poem was nice and refreshing, i liked it


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 8

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    wow!

    that's very touchingly beautiful..you know what? you actually got better with time off..and that's shocking because you were near flawless before u left..

    • Amarige
      January 8
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      Thank you so much Swan, yes it took me awhile to go back to writing..and maybe soon I will take off again..back to college monday..I doubt it if I will have anytime for writing..I will miss it though ..your comments are always wonderful and so suppotive dear. Thank you
      Amarige


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    January 8

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    Original take!
    I enjoyed your piece!

    becca

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