We had something.
I woke up just to be with you.
You were there to comfort me, always.
The way you held me I was perfectly sure
That you truly loved me.
You said that we were good friends,
But your eyes told a different story.
We had nothing.
Author notes
I wasn't really able to do the close amount of syllables in each line haha. sorry
A contest entry
- 8-Line Poems by Daire.
550 points, ended January 23, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - He/ She Doesn't Love Me Back. by Poetryintheblood.
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Comments
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This has a very mature and sober conclusion that shocks us with the truth. I'm sure that many couples - if they looked deep enough - would find the same answer. Really like the lines, "The way you held me I was perfectly sure/That you truly loved me." We do allow ourselves to be fooled by hope at times. Smart, honest and poignant.
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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oh darlin this is the story of my life.. lol
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