Glistening in the night,
From what i can call death,
Or the sight of those eyes,
Pure hatred lies beneath,
Snarling like a dog; baring its teeth,
Sunk into my flesh and making me whince,
No emotion or feeling before or since;
that awful day i went astray,
The final betray.
To command and control,
Led by your hand,
Im by your side; your words ill obide,
No longer will i cry; i cannot pry,
It was me that i saw last night;
Not me, but myself and I.....
Author notes
I don't have a split personality but that is the way this poem turnt out...
I was writing about a man who cheated on his wife... then it twisted to a split personality poem... Random
Just tell me what you think
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wow that is beautifully written it's amazing keep up the good writes
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Sweetheart, that was beautifully written!!
oh my god, i love this so much!!
typo alert!! there's no "h" in wince.
but apart from that it's so perfect!
wow..now i dnt even know which poem of yours is my favourite.
i love them aaawwwwll!!
hope you add more stuff soon!!
keep rocking baby!
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Heya All,
Thank you for the poem comments.
Really appreciate it.
Love you all a lot.
Alex
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this is really cool. i actually didnt realize it was a split personality till u told me so tho. still a great poem!
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I miss you too, and brilliant as always darling
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Quite an interesting write if I do say so myself, and me, and I lol. I liked it, it made my own mind twist lol. Great job Alex, I miss ya and love ya!!
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i really enjoyed this.
very interesting to read
and for me it grabbed me and didn't let go
keep up the great writting
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Hey alex this is great...I love it!
Love ya!
♥
Chey -
intesting and stunning as usurl dark angel
love you
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