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The Dying Day

Missing image

 

 

 

the smooth ebony cross lay
clasped in her hand
an act of defiance
or a false belief -


silence wrapped around her
holding her immobile
rays of the dying sun
pierced the stained glass
bathing her in vivid colour
lighting the black world
of her own making


her body, cold and unyielding
eyes, blind and unseeing
a smile of release
on her lips


a broken rosary
at her feet

 

 

 

 

 

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Option 9
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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 17

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    I can see you are set free by free verse, which is as it should be. Now then, gather your strength and give us more of the same, but with bolder images, more startling metaphors. You know you can do it.


  • breedluv gold member
    January 10

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    This makes me want more.......maybe you were trying for just that response.......? In any case, this is a wonderful response to the prompt.


  • moonbumps silver member
    January 10

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    Congrats on the Silver dear Suz-you and your free verse seem to click perfectly here for this dark prompt.
    Hilly xxx

  • michaeline
    January 9

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    Beautiful poem.Good luck in the contest.Your words speaks volumes and your take on the picture is great.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    January 9

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    You did a wonderful job - whipping up dark words together and weaved into an enchanting dark poem. Well done. Thanks for sharing.


  • doolie gold member
    January 9

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    Wow.  This is an amazing write. Good luck in the contest.


  • csmmoms2
    January 8

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    Stunning

    What a write!
    When I saw the picture I knew what I'd say.
    When Princess Diana was buried
    She could have had diamonds that cost a million dollars in her hair
    all the riches of the land
    Instead softly wrapped in her hands
    was a trinket that probably cost 89 cents
    It was a rosary given to her
    by Mother Tereasa
    who had died three weeks earlier
    This beaded plastic and cheap-wired steel
    had more value that Crown Jewels
    Both were on the same journey
    Helping others is the greatest jewel of all! -c


  • arafura gold member
    January 8
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    Beautifully written. Good luck in the contest!


  • Firequeen
    January 8

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    ooohhhh wow
    you so did the picture prompt justice.
    This grabed me and didn't let go till the last word.
    It left me wondering and wanting more
    Great write


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 8

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    Sounds like she is slipping away into peace... great piece of darkness here Sue!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 8

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    Thoughtful and deep, did she or didn't she?

    I suspect you don't know either

    More terrific FV, now give us some rhyme!!!

  • Bob Fox
    January 8

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    Beliefs

    Seems some can hold onto them & some cannot. I am reminded of the Sepirohtic tre of life as this is one very deep write. Excellent work indeed.

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