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Lovely Discovery

Your eyes so bright
Yet they are burning with passion
Your touch so soft
Yet very demanding

You trace my body
Not leaving one inch untouch
From my neck to my waist
Your hands search eagerly
Then came to a stop
To the treasure buried between my legs

Your lips so soft
But yet hungry for a taste
Your breath low
But yet uneven

Lean in for a kiss
While your hand curiously explored
Your kiss now more fierce
When I gave myself to you
You pulled back to look at my face
While you penetrate my most intimate part

Hands so gentle
Now are rough
Nice built body
Now feels firm and hard

You look down at me
While you search deep inside me
Your hands on my hips
To keep me where you want me

You smiled
As you made your lovely discovery

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 8
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    Thank you for your beautifully penned entry, good luck in my contest, Josie