I dream alone of her sweet beauty.
A moonlit night. Her arms to soothe me.
A carousel of stars for her delight.
And kiss her lips warm and tender.
And with my heart I do surrender,
To this lady, my lasting love.
I dream of she, this splendid woman.
That warms my soul. Whose charms do sway me.
Who I love dearly with words unspoken.
I dream each night, but then I'm woken
As tears run from my eyes.
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Short Love Poems (PW'S OPEN ) by misticmoonlite.
650 points, ended January 12, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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sad but I loved it
I dream of she, Do you mean I dream of her? 7th line. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, and your comments. Lines 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, and 8 is my nost favorite lines. The flow of words very nice. Thanks again, I wish you happiness!
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Oh this is just lovely, but ends so sadly.
A beautiful write.
Congratulations on the HM, well done.
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Awwwww. I can feel every bit of hopeful anticipation and the loneliness. The ending is a heart gripper. Congrats on the honorable mention.
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your a romantic man.. you always give the reader a sensous feast ,,good luck bud
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Oh how sad. Yes I needed the tissues as well
Such a poignant piece.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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oh with the tissues, you do these so well. Sounds as if you are missing someone and it hurts you.
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This is so beautiful and loving, but sad at the same time when you realize that it's just a dream your lady is not real in our realm called reality.
This lady of dreams sounds quite lovely though and perhaps you shouldn't be sad. Perhaps you should be happy that you ALONE can see this wondrous lady and so many men cannot.
My favorite lines in this poem were:
A carousel of stars for her delight.
And kiss her lips warm and tender.
And with my heart I do surrender,
To this lady, my lasting love.
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This should be a winner Bob....Your love poems are so enchantingly beautiful! Written from the heart!
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Oh Bob...I am running out of superlatives to describe your poetry. Your words reach deep into my soul. If only someone felt this way about me. This is simply sublime
Mariana
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Softly romantic. Love expressed beautifully, yet tempered with sadness at the end.
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A wonderful love poem, making me a little envious, then the last line, full of sadness. A great write my friend.
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Bob
It does seem my love poem always end on a sad note. Seems the truth can be very hard to deal with. But I must write as I have seen & experienced. Bless those that find everlasting love my friend. -
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Bob, we who have found that love are blessed, and blessed in many ways. It would be special to be able to share that blessing.
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Somewhere in that rugged exterior beats a true poets heart, romantic and soft. This is you at your best, a joy to read
All the best
Sue x
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Beautiful poem you have written here.
May you dream of this love for eternity.
Exellent poem indeed.
Thanks for sharing your heart and soul.
Tony
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hauntingly beautiful
exqusisite
breathtaking
You have moved me Bob
RF
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Another amazing write from one of Ap's few gifted poets. I wish you luck in the contest
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Oh those morning tears... I hate them! I know them all to well, and would not wish that on anyway! You did great with this one my friend!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love my friend
Nyetta
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gifted
may just be me but i think line 7 should maybe woman and line 8 could maybe start with That instead of The but all that aside i really liked this poem so tender full of love and then the sadness at the end really hits you hard beautiful write
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Had the tragic feel of unrequitted love!!! Your beautiful words draw the reader in and than settles into the heart to softly....Wonderful job and best of luck
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Oh Bob, this starts off so soft and tender, then ends with such a feeling of sadness. It is an amazing poem..one I enjoyed reading. Keep the ink flowing my friend and best of luck.
Linda
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YOUR
love poems expell so much in a few words, thank you for this entry, and keep on sharing your lovely poetry, good luck
mm
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Oh Bob, this is lovely. It's good to see poems from you again. It makes me heart smile. The only thing I have to ask is in the fourth stanza I think... you have The warms my soul... I wasn't sure what that was... maybe She warms my soul... hmmm... well my friend. It's beautiful as always.
~*Lady
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