Oh God
when you are unbendable
to make me your son
when I am overcurious
to label you my forefather
when our overlap is
indispensable
when everything is
to impart the attainment
then, the inference for such
the remoteness
between you and me is "the doubt" of
my mind
Oh God...
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration XIII by Samplette.
700 points, ended January 17, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A powerful write. Very well written. Thank you so much for entering the contest. Sharing your wisdom.
Sam
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Awesome gift you have my friend! Awesome!
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Excellent write
have to read again, doubt, there is a word I know
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But you ask, as if expecting an answer...
to lessen the "doubt?"
So clearly you state your case,
concluding with that doubt...
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Yes, sometimes it is hard to choose the right direction but I am sure that you never had any doubt about it.
~Sonja~
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an excellent piece and great take on the picture prompt. what you wrote about doubt is so wise ... very cutting and beautiful.
thanks and good luck in the contest.
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"the remoteness
between you and me is "the doubt" of
my mind"
This line is the golden nugget of the poem for me. My mind doesn't doubt your gift as a poet, nor does my heart, which you have touched profoundly by this write. Well done. Peace and best wishes in the contest. Rhonda
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oh my
i so love it you took the words directly out of your readers mouth here good luck to you in the contest
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wooow!! Loved your closing. You never cease to amaze me or to move my heart with your writes. Thank you for sharing and all the best in the contest.
Much love
~Noor
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