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This Old House

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This old house holds precious memories
A bed time story and saying our prayers

Tucking us in with warm hugs and kisses

Four young girls snuggled safely in bed

 

My sisters and I playing hide and seek

With the sun shining brightly overhead
Birds serenading us from a nearby tree

Watching our dog splashing in the creek

 

Wrapped gifts under our Christmas tree
The aroma of cookies baking in the oven

Family joining hands around the table
Thanking the lord for all that we have

  

A roaring fire on a cold winter's night 

As the flames dance in splendid colors
We popped corn the old fashion way

Heartfelt memories to cherish forever

Author notes

By ~ doolie
Picture By ~ Glitter Graphics


Gold ~ HM

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  • Lady Ireland gold member
    May 12

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    I like the picture but really think that your tender words paint the presttiest picture here. Great write andf congrats on the trophy.
    Slán
    Dolores x


  • daviscth silver member
    April 29

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    I love this picture and the poem itself is so perfect. The first verse reminds me so much of my childhood. Thank you for taking time to enter my contest.


    • doolie gold member
      May 12
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      WOW, Thank you Cathy for the gold trophy. I'm so happy and honored that you enjoyed my write enough to award it the gold. You've made my day, sweetie. I'm smiling ear to ear.

      Thank You

  • Judith Chandler
    April 29
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    Sounds like a wonderful childhood. Enjoyed your write and congrats on your HM.


    • doolie gold member
      April 30
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and applause. I'm so happy that you enjoyed my write.


  • Symphony
    February 21
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    This was beautiful;

    I know nothing about the form that you used, but the poem itself -

    Contains so many memories and beautiful images, it was like getting a brief glimpse into someone else's life, like when you go past houses on a train, and glance into their windows for a brief second -

    Great job, thanks for entering


  • atomicmagoo
    February 4
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    Lovely! Interesting style I hadn't heard of before.


    • doolie gold member
      February 4
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      Thank you for your wonderful comment. I'm pleased that you enjoyed my write.


  • Ms Raneika
    January 29
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    Wow nice, I'm new to the format. thanks for entering!

    Love, Raneika


  • Peripatetic gold member
    January 23

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    Recalls the most pleasant of childhood memories which are attached to a house, but drawn from the lives people lived within its walls and grounds. As it should be, the old house is like the box in which so many good things have come. Without them, it would just be an unremarkable structure.

    • doolie gold member
      January 23
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I couldn't agree with you more. I'm glad that you enjoyed my write.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 23

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    This is a precious piece. Very nostalgic. You chose excellent line to repeat. Very effective. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you show your work here!

    • doolie gold member
      January 23
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      WOW!!! Thank you Kim for the honorable mention. I'm honored that you enjoyed my write. Thank you for your wonderful comment.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 22

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    Paloszoo has asked me to co-judge with an eye to form so this comment is centred on form, my opinion of the rest won't count in the judging.

    As a French form syllable count and repetition mount much above meter and rhyme in a retourne, indeed both those traditional parts of English formal poetry are optional. The repeat lines are re-used qute naturally here and the poem is exactly to form, great stuff!

    Jeff

    • doolie gold member
      January 22
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      Thank you Jeff. I've only been writing since January 1st so I appreciate you making your comments. If I was doing it wrong then you would have made me aware of that.
      Thanks for your comment and the applause.


  • Luciferschild
    January 20

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    i liked it, it gives off a sense of warmness i almost physically felt, thank you for entering and i will definitely take another look at this


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 15

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    You know I didn't even notice the repetition! Sign of excellent poetry and form...which of course this is. Such a beautiful write and the form is spot on...flows superbly. Really a great job here! Good luck in the contests hunni

    • doolie gold member
      January 15
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      Thank you my lady for such a beautiful comment.
      This was my first attempt on this form and I had alot of fun working on it. Amera has been teaching me some different forms of poetry. She is a wonderful teacher.
      It pleases me greatly that you enjoyed my write.


  • maralisa silver member
    January 13

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    aw a delightfully beautiful take on the promt good luck in the contestmaralisa I love the background to


    • doolie gold member
      January 13
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      Thank you so much for your lovely comment.

  • daviscth silver member
    January 13
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    This is beautiful and your words remind me so much of my childhood home. The memories truly are precious. Thanks so much for the entry and for including your prompt.

    I just love the BG, it reminds me of my grandma's flowers.


    • doolie gold member
      January 13
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      Thank you for your wonderful comment

      I'm happy that it brought back precious memories from you childhood.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 9

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    Yes..this isreally a true depiction of a innocent heart with its emotions and its warmness around..thanks for sharing such an intimate piece...


    • doolie gold member
      January 9
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      Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my write. I appeciate your heartfelt comment.

  • celadia
    January 9

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    this needs no improvement or re-write in my opinion, this is professional quality, you might want to send it to a literary magazine. Lovely memories, well written.


    • doolie gold member
      January 9
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      Wow. Thank you very much for your amazing comment. It pick me up just when I needed.


  • Maxboy gold member
    January 9

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    A wonderful part of life are the memories and you have pointed out many that we have.

    Beautiful.....Best wishes in the contest

    • doolie gold member
      January 9

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      Thank you sweetie for your wonderful comment. We have made many precious memories over the years. I'm happy that you enjoyed my write.


  • condor gold member
    January 8

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    This is a very interesting poem which I find difficult to understand but it reads very well. I guess after I have read a few, I will figure it out. This piece had a really warming feeling to it, and very homely which is inviting. Well done and the very best of luck in the contest.


    • doolie gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you condor for your warm comment. I am glad that you enjoyed my write.


  • bluestoneangel
    January 8
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    Love it! this poem made me smile and took me back..... thanks

    • doolie gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it and that it brought back special memories.

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