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don't leave me naked

your breath was once a scarf
to wrap around my neck
your hair a shirt
that would cover my breast
hands took the place of mittens and socks
to keep the germs from coming in
your arms were pants
when you slept next to me
but now i am bear 
but not without sin
my defenses are down
don't leave me naked

Author notes

this is just how i feel when i step out side. go to school, or to a party.
i feel naked.

do you want to see me naked?

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  • ApollosMuse
    January 13

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    i used to wonder if other people felt like i did...just like you said...when i stepped outside i felt so naked and exposed...this is another excellent piece!!


    • Deathless1
      January 13
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      thank you so much, nothing makes me happier then hearing someone relates to
      my work.
      that is the greatest compliment given.


  • Welcome-To-Hell
    January 12

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    Ah yes the age old tale of being protected from the cold harshness that is the world and reality being stripped away from us usually in our most dire time of need stranded alone to face all the elements that life can throw at us baring our entirety for one and all very deep emotional write well done


  • Laughing Buddh
    January 8
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    nice....though i dont think u need to revise it


  • The Cube
    January 8

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    A good shorty. Im wi,lling to bet you could make this a lot longer and more compelling though. And don't feel like, you got your friends, we can be like...hand-me-down clothing for a while till you get some good name brand stuff again.


    • Deathless1
      January 8
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      i don't know if you want your hair to me my shirt. lol
      thanks

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