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Pushing

All that's left is wonder:
the dried up stream of life,
with nothing left to drip;
broken spigots rusted
like blood on cracking lips.

All that's left is wonder:
the dying of a star;
so distanced from the world
where starting is the end;
a thousand years of cold.

All that's left is wonder:
I find it deaf and dumb.
illusions strike the heart;
poetically insane,
the words tear me apart.

All that's left is wonder:
but how much can I give?
the inspiration lost;
a few last creations,
before the wordflow stops.


Author notes

Monchielle (created by Jim T. Henriksen):
The Monchielle is a poem that consists of four five-line stanzas where the first line repeats in each verse. Each line within the stanzas consists of six syllables, and lines three and five rhyme.

I really like the first stanza. Hmm.

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  • LunaAmara
    February 1

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    illusions strike the heart;
    poetically insane,
    the words tear me apart.

    Those are my favorite lines--the images are fantastic and I like the repetition throughout the poem!


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 9
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    Wow very nice and i too like the first stanza
    ---Janette


  • esroddo silver member
    January 9

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    Well written and creative write

    I loved this stance;
    "All that's left is wonder:
    I find it deaf and dumb.
    illusions strike the heart;
    poetically insane,
    the words tear me apart."
    It seemed to speak to me LISA


  • Kathrin
    January 8
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    wow

    this was stunning and powerful loved it