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Remember

          Red
          lipstick,
          like velvet
          promises; a
          sticky reminder
          of long nights and mornings,
          wearing nothing but sunlight
          and dreaming of silken whispers,
          a warm breath awakening goosebumps;
          two loves lost in layers of tangled sheets.






Author notes

Etheree:
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.

I hope it's more sensual than bash-you-over-the-head-erotic.

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    January 23

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    A very nice sensual write. The aesthetics are a little off, but the content is great. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 22

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    Paloszoo has asked me to co-judge with an eye to form so this comment is centred on form, my opinion of the rest won't count in the judging

    The perfect etheree manages not only the syllable count correctly but makes a smooth triangle so although this one goes down as very good a little smoothing could make it great.

    Jeff


  • esroddo silver member
    January 9

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    What a Beautiful and Sensual Write

    I Have never written The poetry form of Etheree. Its short but I love the the style. I will try to write a few poems. Well enjoyed I will read more of your work. LISA