Why is it that you’re the only one
I want near me when I cry?
Why is it that I see your name
Written bold across the sky?
Why is it that you cannot see
How much you’ve torn my heart?
Why is it that I cannot breathe,
When we are so far apart?
Why is it that your words
Can stop me in my tracks?
How is it that your smile
Has me falling for you fast?
What is this mist around me
That makes things so unclear?
Why do I know that it would leave,
If only you were here?
How can I feel I know you
When I’m told nothing at all?
Why is it that that the thought of you
Has me slowing to a crawl?
How can I think I love you
When you don’t love me back?
Or is this love truly
Nothing but an act?
How can I think I love you,
Through what feels like years of pain?
How can I keep waiting out this drought,
With hopeful thoughts for rain?
Why do these burning rivers
Run like silver down my face?
Why do they only start to fall
When I start missing your ways?
How can I love you?
Damn, nothing seems so right!
Why is it that I love you,
Through all day, and all night?
Why do I feel so confused
With all the answers around?
Where is that special person,
The one I want beside me now?
Why am I still shaking,
Hands turning into fists?
Why did I ever pretend
You were something I would never miss?
Why do I feel so broken,
Why do I hide inside?
Why is this night still falling and,
Why do I feel like I’ve died?
Why am I so restless,
Why do I need to move?
There must be something out there for me,
I suppose something I must prove.
Will you help me find it?
Will you save me from these tears?
Can you fight away the darkness?
Can you protect me from my fears?
Comments
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Good job keeping a nice flow and rhythm, it's consistent and easy to read. As a critique, however, I'd say that a lot of your images are overused, things like "rivers of tears" and "see your name in the sky". Your presentation of these ideas is nice, it's just that there are some cliches.

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Thanks for that =) Yeah, i realised it was a bit cliched, to tell the truth... And i didnt change it, though i probably should, lol...i shall take a look at it thankyou, lol. anything else? I dont usually like rhyming poems, just trying something new, lol :S It was just kinda...a rushed poem, haha, yah, admitted it ^_^ lol...
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Well, for just "trying something new" you did a good job. You should expiriment with rhymes more often
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