A cluster of cells, I became--
Formed from the breath of Earth herself.
Star-dust particles reached down
To birth a soul within me.
And though I feel I truly live,
Is it me or the spirits of the trees?
I am but part of the schemata,
A tendril of the wind brushing against the ground,
A seedling child from the waters.
Is it words I speak, or waves?
Author notes
I didn't use any of the provided prompts..
Just started writing and went with it.
A contest entry
- emotion illness rounds - AUDITIONS by stasis.
700 points, ended February 7, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GIVE ME YOUR BEST by SouthpawGA.
1000 points, ended January 24, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - where did all the good poetry go? by shirk.
1369 points, ended February 15, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 17 of 17
-
yes.
the last line took my breath away.
as well, the beginning drew me in quickly and didn't let go of me until the very last line had finished reverberating.
thanks for entering
-
loved it.
i think it could be more developed, but i love it anyway.
-
yes
I loved this. I know this feeling way too well and you portrayed it beautifully. The last sentence absolutely blew me away.
Please wait for the other judge to comment.
♣ Tegan -
well done indeed
a cluster of cells................................
-
'Is it words I speak, or waves?'
or maybe both? =) spiritual-inspiring words you penned. and i enjoyed reading it. thanks for sharing your wonderful work. =) -
This was a deep write. I espcially loved,
"Star-dust particles reached down
To birth a soul within me."
and
"And though I feel I truly live,
Is it me or the spirits of the trees?"
Beautifully written! -
A cluster of cells, I became--
Formed from the breath of Earth herself.
Star-dust particles reached down
To birth a soul within me.
wonderful write!
-
Sorry you did not win a trophy but you should have.This is well written and thought out.You did a great job.
-
WONDERFUL
The questions you ask im sure all have felt at one time are another...for from the Earth Mother we are made particles of love and simple divine trust...from her we came and to her we shall return to once again become apart of all living things....I really enjoyed and thank you kindly for sharing
blessing , love and light to you this day
-
very nice write
-
good
I really liked the last line.
-
weird poem, i liked it though, i think that it describes a feeling only felt rarely, very creative
-
My first reaction to the first line was, 'oh, cells. kind of technical scientific...' but I was wrong. You can hear a rush of water as you read this poem.
-
This is some super writing here!
I hope you don't mind if I make you a favorite! I'd like to stop by from time to time and read your offerings. This is fantastic!!!
-
wow
this has to be one of the most beautifully written worded and structured poems i have read so far, well well done and best of luck in te contest kathrin xx
-
You did a really great job of writing this poem.Liked your subject and the flow.Read almost like a song.Great job and good luck with the contest.Hope that you win.
-
You could write your way out of a prison cell girl!! Damn..
Adding your comment:
1 - 17 of 17
