You spun your web and caught me
with sweet words and promises
that had my head swim
with thoughts of romance and a chance
at bliss I’d never experienced
The sticky display that looked like a canopy
to embrace and hold me
became a death trap
Your unyielding spirit’s
only desire being that of consuming me
Words: K.Botka
1/7/09
Author notes
Beware the web of deceit.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt 40 to 60 words by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended January 9, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awesome write here! I can really relate to the feelings expressed here..
The sticky display that looked like a canopy
to embrace and hold me
became a death trap
Your unyielding spirit’s
only desire being that of consuming me
Absolutely love the last stanza, especially the first line
Amber
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Thanks!
The pix for the Contest inspired this & it was different from my usual writes. Appreciate your comments! 
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AMAZING best poem i ever read
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You
really have to do more reading!
Thanks for your comment. This was a different write for me ~ I don't usually get inspired in this way...it must've been the Contest & the background.
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I came back to read my fave of yours again and again i loved it. I think you deserve some smily faces
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I love it. I think it's absolutely amazing. Its one of the best I've seen since I joined.I think you are an amazing writer.
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For someone
so young I think you're pretty amazing to be able to comprehend this write. Thanks for your compliments & for finding me. You honor me doll. I'm glad that you've got the support behind you to help you to showcase & enhance your talent!
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OMFG
I loved it deep, depth and not to mention my big time favorite pain. I loved this not to many words and your point was reached excellently I loved this poem. I give you a ten cause that was the kind of poetry i love and it had unusal rhymes which didn't make it boring but, instead a lot intruging. I salute you mon aime.
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Glad you liked it!
This is far from my usual write, but I was inspired & hence it was born. I'm happy to know that I can enter into another genre of poetry style & please someone who likes this kind of write!
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Artfully done. I love how you compared the web to a canopy. It is so true that we often ignorantly embrace our own downfall.
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TY!
The pix prompt brought this out of me along with a lot of youthful stupidity in life!
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This poem is really really good!
My favorite lines in the poem are
"You spun your web and caught me
with sweet words and promises
that had my head swim
with thoughts of romance and a chance"
Great write, and good luck in the contest!
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Deceit is sticky and one strnds connecs to another and tangles you up inside. Good luck to you in the contest. Thank you for sharing your poetry with me.
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How very creative and dark in feel...the lies one tells hurt so deeply in anothers heart...excellent work!
thank you for sharing...
mystic
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touching, exposing lies. Wonderful take on prompt
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a wonderful take onthe promt good luck inthe contestmaralisa
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