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Black Rose

Her tortured crying soul leaves black shadows on her face
Her raw, naive heart has an empty, gaping space
Her beauty is so haunting, like a scarred black rose
She loves you then she pricks you, the people are her foes
A silent cry for help hides inside her soulless eyes
Her plea is left unanswered and a part of her heart dies
She is scared yet she is brave, she will not die in fear
Her legs give out as she silently sheds a single bloody tear

Author notes

http://genevi143.deviantart.com/art/love-lost-6655830 I took this in the very metaphorical sense, I hope you don't mind. This came to me in math class

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  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 13
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    Very dark and good job!!! I loved it!!! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!!


  • misshugglebugglez
    June 30

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    This was soo amazing and very very very beautiful!!!!!!
    its also very startling and spooky... which i like.
    my two favorite lines were the second and third ones... "Her raw, naive heart has an empty, gaping space", and "Her beauty is so haunting, like a scarred black rose"
    this was absolutely stunning!!!!!! i loveddd it!!!!!
    definitely a reflection of the two pretty gold trophies that its earned lolzz nicccceeee.
    hugggggggggglezzz,
    -adria <3


  • PandorasBox
    April 16

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    Very haunting...it reminds me of someone I know, actually..."She loves you then she pricks you"...it makes me think of someone who is desperate for love, yet pushes anyone who gets too close away, for fear of getting hurt.
    Beautiful & sad


  • KatherineAnne
    April 5
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    Wow...

    Great emotion in this. The background goes so well with this write.

    "Her beauty is so haunting, like a scarred black rose
    She loves you then she pricks you, the people are her foes

    A silent cry for help hides inside her soulless eyes
    Her plea is left unanswered and a part of her heart dies"

    I loved your wordchoice and your rhyme scheme.
    =)


  • Mr. Grey
    March 14

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    Lovely background and hanks so much for sharing this one with us and keep up the great work. Please, RTF. I love leaving and getting comments back.


  • Winged Unicorn
    March 4

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    Beautiful. You say a lot in just one short paragraph. The rhyme is great and it is hauntingly sad with an essence of beauty kept in the forefront by the mention of the rose. Amazing it really pulled me in the imagery is brilliant. Good job : )

  • love-taylor-love
    February 28

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    omg, this is absolutely amazing, i mean beautiful. i love the way everything is related back to the rose. a magnificent piece of poetry.


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 20

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    The rhyme in this is very well done, and it has a haunting beauty that I really like. Thank you for entering, and well done!
    -Lena


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 19
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    hauntingly great write. thanks for sharing.


  • Lady Michaella
    February 11
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    omg!! this is fantastic!! really amazing job here.. lovely imagery here.
    ♥♥♥
    x


  • sanguigno
    February 4
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    beautiful imagery i love every single line

    -thanks for entering!


  • Rhythm Child
    February 1
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    thanks for the entry.


  • Loveberry
    January 28

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    Holy Cow

    The flow is undeniably rhythmic and perfect, it embodies pain and emotion- a very well written, haunting, and memorable poem!


  • AnarchistXxXLove
    January 23
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    wow

    This is awesome, full of emotion, pain, great write


  • Dragotha
    January 20

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    Great Theme

    The rhyme was impeccable, I loved this piece it has a great potential for a sequel or a prequel for I would love to know how this character came to be. Very nice words used in description, Good luck in my contestSmile


  • dustookie2
    January 20

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    There is a depth to your lines as they flow with ease from the page....the imagery settles well into thought as you direct the movie playing in my head. Nicely penned. I came to this poem from the Nature lovers contest. Good luck in the contest.


  • Stormy Days
    January 15

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    Wow this is an amazing write well penned with alot of emotion i like how it just flows
    ~GOOD LUCK~
    *Darkness of a soul*


  • named.disaster--x
    January 13
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    Wow.

    this has to be one of, or my absoulute favorite piece in this whole contest. excellent work!


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 7

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    Ooooh love this piece! Great image and flow, and concept! Wonderful job! Good luck!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • faderman1959
    January 7

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    Nicely done! Great take on the picture prompt. I must say the stanzas flowed quite nicely also! They helped to build the emotion in the poem also. Well done and good luck in the contest!

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