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The (ever changing) Symphony of Unknow Hero's

In the end we will fall

Turned dust to dust again

A bullet hole, a silver wing

Dance upon the fire

Dust to dust as ashes fall

No tears are spilt

For an unknown hero

Dust to dust and disappear

A name long forgotten

A symphony of undead love

Will follows him higher

As the mourning disappears

A name long forgotten

Rest upon and empty tomb

Is how the end will come

Dust to dust and ash we become

In the end we will fall

Into a never ending darkness

Never to return

Another name on a grave plate

To be washed away by world hate

Left behind for some unnamed place

 

The grave stone crumbles

and the coffin rots

Yet the ashes stay

Stiffened in this graveyard plot

Surrounded by dust of others

Never to be risen

This is a symphony

To long dead warriors

And the hero's that were never known.

 

Dust to dust, ash to ash

We will return

To be forgotten

Just another for the missing numbers

Now go with peace

Don't fight your end

Its time to leave

For you place waits in some unnamed place

No simple good-byes

 

The Angel of Death take his soul

To where it belongs

And the ashes blow away

Nothing is left, but a crumbling stone

For this un-known hero

Author notes

if you read this I just want you to know every time i reread it i change a line add some so you might want to keep an eye on this song if you like it hence the (ever changing) part of the title

Thanks if you read this and keep an eye on it
(maybe one day it will be done)

A contest entry

i have not been able to write for awhile so im rusty if its bad tell me

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  • Kathraina silver member
    February 1
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    Judged-ola!

    a really good write, with darkness in the lines


  • xxCodykinsxx
    January 14
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    thumbs up

    this is really good.. keep writing

  • mcfreeman
    January 8
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    This is taking a nice shape....

    keep on tweaking.....


  • EmeraldDreams
    January 7

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    I thought this was really good!
    I liked the repetition, it lent an almost hypnotic quality to the piece.
    It is full of very striking imagery and emotion.
    Nice job AP Neice!

  • I like this, the repetition works well. however, if you are changing it, I would rethink the ending line. It's not as powerful as the piece deserves.


    • Stormy Days
      January 7
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      I will think about it the un-known is supose to have a breath in between the un and known parts witch makes it sound a bit better, but I am thinking of another ending thanks
      's


  • Mr. Bleu
    January 7

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    Normally i don't like so much repetition, but i think it works really well in this piece.

    [btw is this your Don Juan Triumphant?]

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