At this time of night
I you are off in flight
Thinking of the time
When we were a dime
But no word could say
How to make you stay
Now I’m here dieing
While your out there flying
I know its right
But I can’t stop the fight
I want you back
But there is a lack
Nothing can say how I feel
So I am going to have to deal
As you are flying
I am lying
Tell myself it’s not real
That will set the deal….
What did you think
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Amazing!
I really liked the flow of the words, and how it all came together, while giving off an amazing meaning.
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The rhyme is forced. It makes no sense.
In the second line "I you" I am sure it is meant to be one or the other.
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nice poem!
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