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sudden turbulence









sudden turbulence -
the toddler grasps tighter
an oxygen mask













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  • Draig aine gold member
    January 21
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    congratulations on the green thingy

    love you take


  • Harrisham Minhas
    January 17

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    Thanks for your entry:

    "sudden turbulence -
    the toddler grasps tighter
    an oxygen mask"

    Aww...this is an unpleasant situation.
    Well-expressed.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • Mari Goes gold member
    January 12

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    That is a scary moment on the plane! I never lived it, and hope never to. You always with such a good feel to show through haiku a very solid image

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