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Boulevard of Broken Dreams


The street lies shattered
as though  now it mattered.
Day came through to light
littered with, "what if, what might?"

Careless raptus captured briefly
Lost by sere words, chiefly
Hurtful, damning, obscene, lewd
How were you so senseless, rude?

Lend me time just to dispel
anguish, hurt, unvarnished hell.
Love but touched us for a moment
Lost now, alone, in broken torment.



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  • SpydurPoet
    November 6, 2009

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    Excellent job. You did a beautiful job with the rhyme, and powerful job with the imagery and emotions.
    Thanks for entering the contest & best of luck.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Callisto Athena gold member
    March 7, 2009

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    Very well written and it touched a special spot in each of us.. Sometimes love goes by so fast we simply can't reach out and grasp it.. Well done!


  • toomysterious
    March 6, 2009

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    Rhyme, rhythm, flow all well expressed, your ending lines summing it all up so perfectly. Reminiscent of "the saddest words of tongue or pen
    are these what might have been" unfortunately the poets name escapes me, but you're in good company.


  • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
    March 3, 2009
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    Stunning. Greatly written. Thanks for the share.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    March 1, 2009

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    Oh wow! What a wonderful write!! I loved these lines:
    Love but touched us for a moment
    Lost now, alone, in broken torment.


    Great write


  • Clovis6790Curious silver member
    January 22, 2009

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    Superb Plus

    Ah, 'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Actually, great imagery.

  • Judith Chandler
    January 7, 2009
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    You said it well and your words could be directed to a friend just as aptly as a lover.


  • arafura
    January 7, 2009
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    Great work poet! Wonderfully well expressed.


  • Carpe Noctem
    January 7, 2009
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    This was beautiful. The ending was so powerful, and such good vocabulary throughout.

    "Love but touched us for a moment
    Lost now, alone, in broken torment."

    Wow. I wish my poetry could have such impact in two lines. You did a great job! Thanks for entering, and best of luck.


  • Rheea gold member
    January 7, 2009
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    This is lovely like after the terrorism attack what might have been.

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