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Is It Still Raining?

When tears intermingle with the rain
it eases the tension-dilutes the pain
When wetness overlaps and implodes
it causes a transfusion; lockdown mode.

Significant assortments of life strategies
can't be placed into neat catagories
Unless the plot thickens into sunshine
all will be lost on the final/fatal incline.

Author notes

I chose option #16
2lullabyhaven

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  • individuality gold member
    August 31

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    a good piece of poetry penned, aye, when we cry it lets us fly freedom's way, for all the presure within has been released and then we can move across into a smile's flapping ray.


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 7

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    Great job with this piece! Like the take you took with the prompt! Good luck!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • BonnieQ silver member
    January 7

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    Great Writing

    Very well written, great flow and rhythm. Here in Western Washington we have been inundated with record snow fall and now with record rains and swellling/flooding rivers everywhere! Actually, it is just another kind of beauty for Washington. Still, we look forward to some sunshine.

    I did notice one spelling error: "can't be placed into neat catorgories" -- catorgories/catagories

    This is a winner!

    Luv and hugs, BonnieQ


    • 2lullabyhaven
      January 7
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      Thanks for catching the error for me, also for your review of this...I had no clue it was doing all that in your part of the world, rarely do I watch the news anymore..


  • Denerica
    January 7
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    Really flowed and I always loved the rain resembling the tears. Nice sister, blessings.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      January 7
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      Thank you so kindly, I remember one day walking in the rain after a love affair gone bad, I was so happy it was raining, it stood as a cover for me...hence the poem


  • Unsigned gold member
    January 7

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    This is really well put together and expressed.

    Congrats on an excellent write

    Simon


    • 2lullabyhaven
      January 7
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      Thanks Simon, I look at prompts and try to take them somewheres hahaha I don't always succeed...smile


  • Bohemianwriter
    January 7
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    awesome job here dude. really.
    good luck in contest.


  • whitenoise
    January 7

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    lovley rhyme here nicely smooth with descriptive words for us to feel the poem lovley and gentle
    "unless the plot thickens into sunshine"
    i especially liked this line
    well done xx

  • goalsv
    January 7
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    Nice job with the prompt. A nice metephoric look at natur and life.

    • 2lullabyhaven
      January 7
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      Ah, Z, I just write sometimes to be writing, I suppose...smile...I'm really still a little sleepy, so if this doesn't make much sense, this is my alibi...how are you?

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