As shooting stars bounce off your eyes and mandolins stir bliss,
Another warm and tight embrace, another sizzling kiss.
The scent of your perfume pervades this meeting of our hearts,
The moon, the stars and all our senses play their perfect parts.
Here side by side, and hand in hand, let's while away the night,
In music made for us alone, and songs of pure delight.
Let's dreams of dreams immersed in waves of shoreless fantasies,
Play magic on our heartstrings with the sweetest ecstasies.
And visit then the heaven that I see within your eyes,
Or hitch a ride upon the stars that shoot across the skies.
Let's dance in tune in timeless steps amidst the shifting clouds,
And tell the tales of our romance to all the starry crowds.
Let's watch the parting of the moon, the rising of the sun,
Until the morning, when at last, our little dream is done...
Author notes
Quote: "It's all make believe isn't it?" - Marilyn Monroe
Azgar
A contest entry
- Romantic Co-Write/Rhyme by piccola.
400 points, ended January 11, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whisk Me Away... by TwilightDazzles.
700 points, ended January 17, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Summer's gone, I overslept and woke up to the chill of fall by reckless abandon.
490 points, ended January 31, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lovely long lines by cricketjeff.
1800 points, ended March 5, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Sigh!
BEautiful romance, sadly there is not room for more major cups.
This contest is of such an impossibly high standard I am killing myself judging it, wonderful poem I can honestly say I wish I had written
Jeff
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Now this is the kind of poem I love to read. Lovely flow here and you do not miss a beat-a beautiful romantic write-
Good Luck
Hilly
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Do you think ...
Marilyn was on to something?
This is a very nice poem. Well done and done well.
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What a lovely dance. "Play magic on our heartstrings"--beautiful! The meter is perfect. Good luck in the contests!
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wow this is fantastic no wonder its won gold. I really liked this it just paints such a perfect picture in my mind for me. Great write.
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Beautiful
I liked it was long and drawn out. Was good liked symbolism and the refrences good job mon aime i salute you but, try just try to not hold it out and make me lose my lunch with lovey dovey but, that's just my opoion i am sort of a pesimist.
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Wonderful
Loving the flow of this poem
Very romantic and easily related to.
Great job!
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LOVELY!
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THANKS FOR ENTERING!
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I think this has very good rhythm and rhyme but I don't like it visually. The blocky write out really puts me off when reading a poem. Contained good imagery and well done rhyme.
Thanks for entering.
Laura -
I love this, its amazing! The flow and rhyme are perfect and never break, and you really captured my attention from the very beginning.
"As shooting stars bounce off your eyes and mandolins stir bliss"
my friend plays the mandolin and I could hear music playing in my head as I read it. Thanks for sharing -
this is a beautiful poem but sadly i cannot talk it because i won't allow any poem that has already won a trophy but if you will put another one in i will gladly take it.
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A beautifully serene write. Excellent job, such wonderful flow. Thanks for following my rules and for entering and best wishes
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Wow! I see why this poem won gold! It's wonderful! You did an amazing job with the meter in such long lines. This is a sonnet you should be proud of.
Love,
Amera♥
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Lovely!
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wpnderful
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Quite beautiful.
My only thought is to left align, make your line breaks clean
and read it aloud ... there are a few spots where it doesn't seem seemless. Make the rhyme match...count syllables.
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