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In the Poetry Aisle




Setting:  Aisle in small bookstore.

Characters:
Nice looking female browser
Well-read guy
Cyrano wannabe, hidden from sight


Cyrano, speaking  into lapel:
Say, that's a great book.

Well-read guy, straining to hear voice in ear-piece:
Hey, that's a great look.

Nice looking female browser:
You talkin' ta me?

Cyrano, perplexed:
I was noting that is a great volume.

Well-read guy, eyes focused not on book:
I was noting you have great volume.

Female:
Guy, you're outta line.

Cyrano, at wits' end:
I noticed you in line at the coffee shop.

Guy:
I noticed you without a top.

High ear-piercing ring heard from the next aisle.

Female:
Say, is this a gag for one of those reality shows?

Cyrano:
Just a shy guy! This is not working, Guy!

Guy:
Just a shy guy, a lurking guy!

Female, demeanor, accent and attitude changing, smiling broadly:
You are too bad at this to actually mean what your words imply.
I took you for one of those stuffy know-it-alls and tried to play dumb!

Cyrano yanks mini mike from  lapel, walks past Guy, stuffing it in his hand:
You are on your own. You're hopeless!

Guy, laughing:
My friend thought  he could  help, for I am at a loss for words in person,
but with a pen or a keyboard, I can craft a fine line.

Cyrano, turning back, guides them both to the internet café corner
of the book shop,  motions for them to sit down  and then calmly exits.

Female:
Well,  prove it. Let's start over, type away.
Tell me what you really wanted to say.

Guy,  flexing arms, stretching  fingers  prepared  for action, tapping the keys:

When my eyes first glimpsed your light,
there, in the poetry aisle,
I knew I must put up a fight
to open your eyes to my style.

It was the way you held that classic volume,
tenderly, with love and appreciation,
that led me to presumptuously assume
that between us there may be a connection.

So I resorted to means unconventional,
which you discovered were far from successful,
but then I also uncovered your pose so intentional
putting off pretentious passes you find distressful.

So here we are, caught in time on a new page,
pretenses aside, hearts pounding in this strange venue.
Do I cease and desist in words romantic and sage
or should I toss caution and.......

Delicate hands, with graceful, long fingers, neatly manicured
with softly toned nails brushed aside the broad, masculine hands
on the keyboard, pushed the caps lock and typed the word
...CONTINUE!
















Author notes

In the Poetry Aisle, part two http://allpoetry.com/poem/5005473

part three http://allpoetry.com/poem/5014152


Option 4: Be a Cyrano for Yem.

Here is a link to a Caption Thread page where mid-way is dialogue
that Yem crafted for Sir Ima (playing a Cyrano character)
to pass on to TTG to woe rockabye, known on AP as rockabye21.
Just some background info!
http://thebettyboard.com/boards/viewtopic.php?t=5&postdays=0&postorder=asc&start=480

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Comments

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  • Oh.....dad likey alot...lol. I like how your characters spark with ignition from the subtle connection that was seen even through mis happened words. I am excited as I am beginning another one of your exciting series! You so are the stuff!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      March 5
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      Hey! Such fun to read your comments!

      Would have missed you if not on an even crazier
      sleeping schedule. Had to be up in the day--
      and then, part seven wore me out!!


  • pixiestix gold member
    February 4
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    Congrats on the gold!!!!! Well deserved.

    Part 4 in the wings?


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 5

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      And to you for your glitteries, also!

      That character keeps waking up
      and wanting more words to say.
      Will let him have a good long sleep,
      for his counterpart does not seem
      to get enough!!

      Soon I will hear whispering in the wings!


      • pixiestix gold member
        February 5

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        So far my passing moon sleep theory has proven true only for me although the cycle technically completes with the next full one on the 7th.

        What happens next left to the imagination...

        You are quite a good storyteller.


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    February 2

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    Portrait of our dear Yem?

    I can see this happening, you're very good at setting the stage, had me grinning at the shy guy attemping to lure the girl into conversation...am off to Continued!

    Let the ink flow!
    blessings, Sandi


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 2
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      Hi, Sandi.
      This all started from a prompt by Yem
      to be a Cyrano for him---and then it
      grew from there!

      Thank you for the blessings!

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    January 30

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    The official comment for voting purposes. The poem will probably be the one that best describes who I am...or rather who I am not, lol I am indeed an awkward, strange fellow around women, at least at first and probably always, lol.

    I got to go buy me some books. Thanks Cyrano, I mean M-C!!!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 30
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      When part two is posted,
      you will see your natural charm
      is quite successful!!!!!!!!!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 30
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      Hey! Lots of entries to tease your mind.

      I just finished part two in word,
      hadn't even looked back at it yet,
      when Microsoftput up that nasty box
      that it has to close and that I may lose
      all or part of my work. AAAAAAAAGGGGGGHHHHHHH.
      I managed to save it and pop it over to Betty.
      I would have cried!!!!!!
      Haven't even started illustrations yet.
      Will be a while!

      • Yemassee gold member
        January 30
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        There is to be a second one? Cool! I have no limit to my vanity, lol


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          January 30
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          Still have to proof it
          and see if it all makes sense.
          Usually I see in my head
          what I want to create to illustrate--
          I may have to draw people---
          not easy!!!
          Will be ready when you get home!!!


  • Sudo Nimh silver member
    January 27

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    Oh Aes!..I love this work! The satire is delightful and the breaks are pure realism...the lapses of unique misunderstandings..and then....words flow uniimpeded by face or form...flowing from a heart asd noble as that of the "noblest"man...I have always loved Cyrano...especially as gerard depardieu in film..though steve martin made me laugh more.
    what quite intrigues me is the picture at the end...first i saw a horse like image..then a woman reaching..then a waterfall...


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 28
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      Glad you liked it, C-J!

      It was inpsired by Yem's contest prompt
      and a play on another situation
      we had contrived
      where some of the characters
      were less than human!

      Le chapeau, the intent of the drawing,
      large and plumed for Cyrano to wear.

      Aes


  • gaze
    January 22

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    I really enjoy reading your prose, you do it so well, presenting the characters and the story line.
    Here you mixed prose and poetry, and the result was very good.
    When words seem to be stuck, they usually come out in a way we didn't quite want. My thoughts when this happens to me is 'what I mess I've done'
    I liked this one, amusing and clever


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 22
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      Thank you, Mariza!

      Your comment reminded me of leaving messages
      on an answering machine, particularly any that
      do not have a play-back, or edit feature.
      The throat gets a frog, the tongue trips, alas!

      Nice to share thoughts again!

      M-C


      • gaze
        January 22
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        Oh yes! I have a very bad relationship with answering machine. I kind of start with a 'hum' and finish with 'ah-and-ok', I really dislike leaving message that way, I bet most of the times the people who listen to them can't understand a thing I said.

  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    January 18
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    Embarassed Guy.


    Understanding Browser.

  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    January 18
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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    January 18
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    Moving forward?


  • Hinemoa silver member
    January 17
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    Hello M-C, Oh my this is funny, I remember the character that spoke words of love behind he bushes while his friend repeated them to the girl he loved, only this one is slightly different, he gets the words wrong, very clever...I LIKE!
    Good luck M-C
    Hine


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 17
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      Thank you, Hine!

      Yem's pompt was too good not to take up!

      The story of life---for all the "understandings"
      that happen, those "misunderstandings"
      creep in to mess things up!!

      M-C

      • Hinemoa silver member
        January 17
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        It's Hinemoa M-C not Jenelda


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          January 17
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          Oh, for heaven's sakes!
          I had been looking over the works---
          and mixed up my down-unders!!!!!!

          Sorry!!!


          • Hinemoa silver member
            January 17

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            LOL that's ok everyone mixes us up, coz we're all Aussies I guess, they call us the upside down girls

            Love Hine


            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              January 17
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              Well, that is good reason for fun, upside down,
              confusing the right-side-uppers!!!---or so we
              think we are!

              M-C


  • hugh wyles silver member
    January 12

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    Dear M-C (Cleo),

    I’m sorry that I’ve stayed away.
    My brain has been unsound.
    I think my Muse has gone to ground
    and left me nought to say.

    But Edna’s slightly better now
    and so my mind and brain
    are starting to come right again
    and I can think somehow.

    Now Cyrano and that smart-ass, well-read guy
    when trying to chat-up beautiful females -
    especially ones with well-groomed, painted nails,
    may earn a painful wallop in the eye.
    'Twere better to employ some common sense
    e'en though your story leaves us in suspense.

    Good luck in the voting.
    Applause and, now my mind is clearing, much love, big hugs and XXX Hugh (R.) M-A.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 13
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      Oh, happy day! Hugh has come to play!
      So glad you are here to have your say
      and that you bring "slightly better" news,
      along with your most Hughish views!!!!

      So is the birthday boy having some fun today?
      You know, birthdays officially can last a week!!

      The best to you...

      M-C


  • jenelda silver member
    January 11

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    Oh WOW M-C this is very powerful. I remember the scene when Cyrano prompted the other guy to woo the lady on the balcony. A very funny take of the play. I enjoyed reading it very much. Good luck in the voting M-C
    Jenny


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 11
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      Good to see you, Jen!

      I couldn't resist following Yem's contest prompt.

      Thank you!


  • iamfromabove
    January 10

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    I can see so many guys or girls doing something like this. You put it all together perfectly
    loved it. best of luck
    Mia


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 11
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      Nice to meet you, Mia.

      Yes, sometimes overplay
      is better than underplay
      when it comes to catching
      someone's attention!

      M-C


  • angelica silver member
    January 10
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    Very fascinating M-C I had quite a giggle at the conversations and looks between the two of them.
    I'm not sure if I understood a lot of it as the characters are unfamiliar to me, but I did enjoy reading your great entry.
    You are amazing my friend and I love to read the comments between you and Yem as much as I do reading the poem.
    Good luck in the voting.
    Love Joan


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 10
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      Cyrano de Bergerac, a real person, but celebrated in a play by Rostand.
      wrote love lines for a friend---

      Yes, sometimes the "off-stage" banter is better than the piece
      supporting it!!!

      Thank you, Joan!

      M-C


      • angelica silver member
        January 10
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        Ahhhh yes, I've heard of that name, but am not familiar with his works
        The banter is good but never over rides the poem my sweet friend, it just adds to it
        Joan.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          January 11
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          Thank you, Joan!

          We do like to chat a bit on my pages, right?

          M-C


          • angelica silver member
            January 11
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            Right M-C the comments get quite hilarious at times which is a good thing as it makes people happy. I know I enjoy them.


            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              January 11
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              Check out a fellow Betty (our home board) whom I enticed
              over here. Pixiestix. Then I let Yem know another one
              of the Betty gals was here and that he would like the site---
              good writer. More good banter!!!!


              • angelica silver member
                January 11

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                Right, will do that, ohhh and your last commenter ( iamfromabove ) is my real niece Maria, but likes to be called Mia. I've told her to enter the group contest, she's been absent too long. Yem should remember her.


                • Aesthete2000 gold member
                  January 11
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                  I had noted that and was about to read some of her work.
                  Saw her author page and the neice reference,
                  Talent all around, right?


  • bozoloper
    January 9

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    hahaha, well now, you apparently have quite the knack for love poetry from the male perspective. that said, i enjoyed the word play with the misheard commentary, you did a fine job at creating plausible misconstruations (i don't think that's a word, but i like it!). Very good description as well, a wonderful blend of poetry and prose!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 9
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      Loper, you arrived!

      Ooooo, like the word, "misconstruations."
      Good thing Ima as Cyrano didn't try to
      transmit that one through his lapel!

      Yes, I do like my characters
      to speak for themselves,
      even if they need prompters!
      It must be all those years of writing
      Summer Theater scripts for kids!

      Thank you!

      M-C


  • catz Moderators member
    January 9

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    A good dialog written here, a mis-construed conversation turned into a funny piece of work. Leave it to the two of you do something like this, very entertaining.
    Good luck in the contest

    Dee


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 11
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      Or it could be a poor phone connection!
      A totally different communication.

      But isn't that what poetry is about,
      expressing a thought, setting it down on the page,
      but, oh, the interpretation from another mind!!!!

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    January 8
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    "Cyrano, perplexed:
    I was noting that is a great volume.

    Well-read guy, eyes focused not on book:
    I was noting you have great volume."

    I had to come back to read that again, lol The height of Yemish humor.

    Poor me, poor Sir Cyrano Cucumber.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 9
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      I think I was a bit Yemish before I got here!
      But you bring it out to a greater extent!!!

      Cyrano gave it a great try!

      • Yemassee gold member
        January 9
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        that is my goal, to make everyone Yemish! Got to run, bye!


  • MargaretG
    January 8

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    This is by turns funny, profound and sweet! The comedy of misheard lines is priceless and brought to mind games of "telephone" when I was young. The poet's confession and the final word were lovely. Well done, I enjoyed this a lot!


  • waydownuponjoy
    January 8

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    I love your imagination ...

    and this should become just one of many more chapters as well. Love the poem and the ending was per-fecto! You do have that knack for making something out of someone and I think that with mooseman that you could not want a better study! Great stuff! jy


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 8
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      Granted, an unusual, enigmatic study!
      But the mooseman may have more to say
      about a continuance!!!!!!
      Thank you, Joy, for the "great stuff."

      M-C


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    January 7
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    Very good Aes...Enjoyed reading it and if it continues ...well, let me know...


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 8
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      Hah!!!! Darlene, thank you.

      That's how Quest started, just a one part story!
      And it grew to ten...and more!

      Continues? Rather than leaving them
      suspended in time at the keyboard????


  • arafura gold member
    January 7
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    I love it! Wonderfully well written so very enjoyable to read. Bravo!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you, arafura! I look forward to your visits and comments!

      M-C

  • Yemassee gold member
    January 7
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    Smart looking, beautiful graphics!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you, nice of you to notice
      as you always do!

      Decided an impromptu Cyrano type hat
      was symbolic enough to set the tone.

      But where is the friendly face in the avatar,
      the shy smile???????


      • Yemassee gold member
        January 11
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        Is it shy? I'm tricking everyone. I'm really a Don Juan, Ok, I couldn't keep a straight face there!


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          January 11
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          Hah! Mystery poet of many faces!

          Idea drifting in---thinking of those solve-a-mystery parties---
          but they are usually murder mysteries---hmmmmm---board to board
          mystery party.

          Maybe I should just shelve that one, considering rocky and I were
          the only ones who could follow the caption thread story---and we were
          writing it!

          • Yemassee gold member
            January 11
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            I looked at the thread last night, so much tinfoil, lol. So very Yemish there.


            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              January 11
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              It was not the sanest thread before,
              but then the flamingos, big foot
              following Ima and Yem arriving at
              the "mansion'--cross pollination
              of wit, as if brains had pollen!!!!
              Post-Constantine any topic was
              fair game!


  • pixiestix gold member
    January 7
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    Linking to the Caption Thread?! *cringes* Fortunately for me (personally),I was "unplugged" at that point in time. On the flip side, I sadly missed out on that developing storyline.

    Routing for the well-read guy to succeed! You had me chuckling at the mistaken lines with the sense of "Oh no, he didn't just say that!" Nice that the lady saw the guy inside and didn't judge based on the verbal stumbles. Leaving the door open for a happy ending.

    By the way, small bookstores are still in existence in my neck of the woods. Many of the boardwalks and/or little seaside towns have them.

    I really enjoyed reading this, Aes.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 7
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      And we so missed you at that time.
      We had you arriving and being whisked off mysteriouly
      in a black limosine!

      Yem wrote the dialogue for TTG, who vainly disdained a hearing aid,
      and messed up all the lines that Ima prompted him to say to woo rocky!
      so this was a bit of a Yemish inside joke.

      Seeing the guy inside---isn't that what it's all about!!!

      Thank, Pix,

      Aes


      • pixiestix gold member
        January 7
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        You mean it's not the hokey pokey?

        Not judging the book by its cover is a fitting message in the poetry aisle.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          January 7
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          And isn't that what we are all about here---
          looking inside the cover...?


          • pixiestix gold member
            January 7
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            Yes...here, there and everywhere. I hope Sir Paul doesn't mind that I borrowed one of his lines.


  • Yemassee gold member
    January 7
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    Thank you!!!!

    I'm afraid you know me too well. I am indeed a buffoon, yes, in general but especially around women and words come out of my mouth that are simply sad, lol

    So you think I should try a bookstore? I think they're all too fancy for me there.

    I like the end, I'm not so jaded that such a romantic ending can't make me smile.

    Ah if life were only like your poem, or a movie...but if it were mine would be like, Apocalypse Now, lol.

    Both funny, touching upon truth, and romantic, what more can a reader want?

    Thanks MC, I didn't think anyone would touch this option!

    I'll stop in a bookstore on my way home tonight, see if any half-blind women are in the classics section. But it's usually only me in that area, lol.

    I wish I could vote in this contest, I so wish I could vote!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 7
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      Thank you for..."I wish I could vote in this contest, I so wish I could vote! "


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      January 7
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      I was nervous as to your reaction!!!
      Notice the setting is a small bookstore,
      not one in the mall. For I am sure
      somewhere a small store still exists,
      but of coure, had to add the internet cafe
      option to keep up with the times!


      • Yemassee gold member
        January 7
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        It would be just like me to sit across from a woman and text message her instead of talking to her, lol. I'm horribly shy, even at this advanced age.

        Why would I be bothered by someone who wishes me well? I need more friends like that! And if any have a cute 23 year old friend...sorry, just that silly story I wrote the other day, lol.

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