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Transmigration On the Hill

I found you- swirling about the resonant topography, inspiring the spirits to abscond into the internal shade of the rotating axon.

Here we blaze as stars wrapped with nerves extending sinuous limbs, eloquently swaying within the undulating current.

Your candescence pulsates to the cadence of your presence, rhythmically oscillating at the shores of existence, replenishing the streams of consciousness.

You've found me.

We are at Golgotha and we are crucified.

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  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    February 18

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    Really appreciate the imagery here. We are all and everything and once having found that out if we are indeed found out we shall be crucified for relishing in the freedom of what we have found.

    Very nicely done.


  • UnknownFemale
    February 14

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    Awesome imagery, and use of words...

    Your candescence pulsates to the cadence of your presence, rhythmically oscillating at the shores of existence, replenishing the streams of consciousness.

    very sweet piece.


  • John Henry
    February 14

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    "The idea is very simple, so simple that if you are not careful you will forget it. It is this--that everyone in the world is Christ and they are all crucified."
    -- from Sherwood Anderson's "The Philosopher"

    Except your poem feels like a kind of togetherness, where Anderson was saying that we're all ultimately alone. So many different Christs, expressions of the religious impulse.

    • dabpunx
      February 14
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      i'm so happy you understand. i never heard that quote before but it is exactly what i am expressing. amazing i have to read that. as to the implication that we are ultimately alone i think it is a matter of perception that can be taken either way and that the topic transcends the idea of aloneness and togetherness perhaps to a unity we can barely glimpse but cannot escape from.

  • lciccone
    February 2

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    Great!

    I love your vocabulary. It makes me giddy inside to see someone as intelligent as yourself being poetic, since a handful of intellects are portrayed as monotonous drones.


    • dabpunx
      February 2
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      thanks a lot my friend cant wait to read more from you too!

  • unraveled
    January 16

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    Awesome, i love when people can use phrases like "internal shade of the rotating axon" and make it sound poetic.

    i've really been liking your stuff lately
    this is neat. short but sweet.
    thanks for your entry,
    -cassidy


    • dabpunx
      February 2
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      thank you! i like your poetry too you are a natural.


  • Deathless1
    January 8

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    this paints those pictures in my mind.
    and you know how much i love that. lol
    internal shade of the rotating axon, that is great.

    loved it.

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