Have you ever felt it rain within
Tainted cloud of muddy sin
Pitter patter of broken hearts
Reminding you of shattered starts
Shards of broken glass protrude
Continuing my self hate mood
The dirt remains as thick as clay
My heart returns with great dismay
Sunshine lost it's luster bright
When I saw you leave tonight
The story told is that of loss
Upon my broken heart emboss
My lips are left as dry as you
Permanently scarred and blue
A bracelet made of charms that bind
Taking what's left of my mind
Author notes
I chose the word bank option and used:
rain
sunshine
story
lips
glass
dirt
cloud
bracelet
A contest entry
- The water doesn't ruin --x by Noir mariposa...x.
750 points, ended March 10, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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"My lips are left as dry as you
Permanently scarred and blue
A bracelet made of charms that bind
Taking what's left of my mind"
What a strong and striking stanza to finish with!
I loved the whole asking of the question thing to start with
Thank you for entering, I wish you the best of luck ^^
Claire x -
wow, this is amazing, i have trouble taking words and factering a poemaround it... you have acheived a beautiful result.. welll donnee
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hmm
cleverly done
those kinda contests are too challenging for me and here you are mastering it lol
thanks for he good read and good luck
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