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From shadow to light

each raindrop that falls
a story it brings along
not penned from ink..but water
--glass words from cloudy lips
splatter in the dirt

leaves glistening;
treasures revealed:
a bracelet, a pen cap
found in the footprint of a bear
in the heart of a forest

just as sunshine shares a stage with the moon,
all shadows pass to light
revealing what went unseen
in the dark.








~Nakatrea

Author notes

-- rain
-- moon
-- sunshine
-- story
-- lips
-- glass
-- tiles
-- dirt
-- leaf
-- cloud
-- bracelet
-- cap
-- bear (teddy)
-- ink
-- splatter

and so my muse began to flow...

This poem is a little on the random side...
but i made it mean something in the end.
I personally LOVE the first stanza... its my new pride and joy
I used all the words without difficulty.
I hope this is what you were after!

♥Kat

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A contest entry

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    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 2

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    Beautiful piece hun! The flow and the imagery is fantatic. Thanks for sharing, and congrats on the bronze.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 25

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    wow! this is fantastic. the write you came up with from the word bank is amazing. thank you for sharing this with me today. congratulations on the bronze trophy and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    February 18

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    "each raindrop that falls
    a story it brings along
    not penned from ink..but water
    --glass words from cloudy lips
    splatter in the dirt"

    Yep, I agree Kat, that has got to be one of the best you've written

    Loved this, you should keep writing my darling ^^


    Thanks for entering,
    I wish you luck!
    Claire x


    • Nakatrea
      February 18
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      Aww Thanks so much Claire! I'm so glad you liked it!


  • Flare the Arcphoenix
    January 16

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    That's cool....^_^

    Once again, you approach a waiting audience with excellent simplistic words and a great use of them; each word, though it seems uncomplicated, has a story within...ready to be opened and explored.
    I like the bear imagery - I could see the glistening pen cap half-buried in the footprint of a bear in my mind...when you can see the picture in very clear detail mentally, you know that the imagery is done well. So, that's how I know that you've done very well with this piece. ^.^

    Great work, and good luck in the contest!

    --Flare
    o}--{=======>

    P.S.: You have inspired me with an idea of my own...even though it'll be a while before it's compiled.

    • Nakatrea
      January 16
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      Thank you soooo much! This means so much to me. I didn't know what to do with "bear" . It didn't fit... neither did "cap". At first I was thinking "Charm bracelet" but then... I had the first stanza and it was brilliant. so i went with it can fought my way through it.

      Can I declare myself a queen of imagery? well for today the answer is yes

      I tend to be inspiring often these days... hmmmm


  • Valley Girl silver member
    January 12
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    Let me know when you have finished this.

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