Watch it flow
Down it goes
Never comes back
And that’s a fact
Dying now
Heads are bowed
Gasping breath
Near to death
One last word
While things are blurred
"I love you
You haven’t a clue."
Eye are closed
Feelings disposed
Heart has stopped
Breathing dropped.
No longer here
No more Dear
Her feelings gone
Her oath withdrawn.
Author notes
whoa
I think my writing need to get back in shape XD. but really, I'm not kidding lol. Anyways, I got really bored and was talking to a friend about how ketchup looks like blood and ended up writing and that's what it turned into. Also tried the rhyming thing for the first time. hope it wasn't too aweful lol.
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;o i liked this. i love the emotion in it and the stanzas are all pretty good. awesome that ketchup like inspired that :3 Three clappys.
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awe! thanks so much
DD
and yuppers, sometimes food is magical like that
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woah, interesting, the first stanza is kinda almost, synical, light heated bleeding, then the next verses are like dark and completly change the tone of the poem, at least thats how i read it. very nice
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