Friend against friend…
He’s like my brother,
How did it come to this?
A gun in my hand…
waiting for a clear shot,
as he hunts me…
Got to be quiet…
The bastard shot me...
He actually shot me…
Now I’m walled up,
Waiting for him
to pass my line of sight…
Red before my eyes...
Heartbeat pounding...
Breathing shallow…
I’m dying…
I know that…
My only hope,
is I can take
the bastard with me…
Footsteps on the stairs…
He comes into my line of sight…
I fire…
Bang!!! Bang!!! Bang!!!
Bastard… He got me…
I fucking hate Call of Duty 4…
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Inspired by & written about/for my real-life best friend, Jayde1... 
Dedicated to vanderner's rocking game chair... 
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wow
hahaha
thats awsome dude
from start to finish it made me laugh.......
great words dude
flow and form
fantastic
thanks for writing this for me
luv jayde
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You got me worried there for a minute!! LOL... I'm gather that's some kind of computer or playstation game?
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PMSL..I dunno why but I skipped over the part that described this poem as humorous....I am glad I did...because it made me
at the surprise ending. Hilarious..Bravo!
Mariana
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wow this is really powerful and deep big brother!!! This is a bit painful to read as I don't want to think of somebody shooting my big brother!!!! You did an awesome job portraying this piece its truly very excellent and sooo well written!!! Your imagery is truly excellent!!!!!! Great details and descriptions!!!!! You did an incredible job I love it!!!!
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Well if ya take em down with ya loosing ain't so bad
Excellent write hun, I hate Call of Duty to...but for different reasons...lol. 
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LOL okay it took me a minute to figure this out(okay maybe three or four minutes ) but in my defense, it's early
It definitely grabbed my attention.
You're so very clever!
~Pastel
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ahahaha!- never ever in all my reading ah god love ya fritz... i know exactly how you feel. CoD: WAW gets me every time too. wonderful read as always- this really had me on the edge and... then end. was just magnificent. well done.
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well done my firend
another fab read
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Sublime!!
I loved this piece, but how could I not?? considering i got my name on it, its all mine baby any one else tries to take it from me, will have a tree trunk wrapped around there head, a coconut shoved up there anal passage, and a couple of bananas shoved up there nostrals. I think ive started enough that this is MINE!!!!
P.S. In the land of the Giant Monkey, X boxes never really took off, this is because as simple creatures we think far to littrally, got a bunch of sticks made a box shape, and put an x in there, how fun can that be??
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Cool, glad ya liked it... lol!
In the land of the smaller monkey they embraced the Game cube, donned a ball, and they race, they fly, they fight, they traverse the trickiest of terrains... And so the Giant Monkey did say 'Let there be bowling' and he saw that it was good... And so verilly, the legend of Monkey Ball travelled far & wide, the world over, across the seas, beyond the lands, beyond the skies and so a new religion was born of these simple creatures, that greatly angered the great Gods of gaming, for low & behold profits spoke loss as the world embraced the way of the monkey...
Amen...
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Call of duty! You kill me! lol.
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LMAO!
Oh, Paul will love this!
The tension, the excitement! lol!
You are a true gamer!
"The bastard shot me,
He actually shot me…"
---- Classic!
Great job here, funny funny piece!
Well done!
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