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The Water Does't Ruin (Tainted Rain)

The banks swelled forth
colliding with soil, mud
turning into soupy disarray.

Rain beats heavily
washing grass stains away,soiled
being cleansed into earth.

As our souls break free
from tainted constraints
Footsteps break reflecting puddles.

The water doesn't ruin the rain.

Author notes

Title Promt: The Water Doesn't Ruin

My Ap husband helped me with finding a few replacement words on here Thankyou SGT. Strachan

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  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    February 15

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    "Soupy"
    That is now officially my new word
    It was lesbianism but now that can take its place

    "As our souls break free
    from tainted constraints
    Footsteps break reflecting puddles.

    The water doesn't ruin the rain."


    Thank you very much for your entry
    I wish you the best of luck
    Claire x


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    January 7

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    Well done and great imagery here.
    Good luck to you with this one!




    Jeremy0826


  • fairytalelovestory
    January 6
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    Very beautiful, and goes well with the prompt. good luck


  • Tom The Invader
    January 6
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    : well done! And you're very welcome babe!