a.
cracked out fears and tears
are breaking through
the already damaged
and melted mind.
am I home,
home in my own thoughts?
the stars are pounding
and my temples are breaking;
the pressure is too much.
you’re making me fall apart.
b.
it’s too late to lie,
I’ve already learned all of your tricks
and you can’t come up
with anything more
because I cut off
all the sleeves on your shirts.
the cards are out in the open
and my nail polish is staining my thumbs
different shades of purple, pink,
black and blue.
and for once, I think the bruises hurt more than the words.
c.
I want to eat an apple right until I reach the core.
-it will be the first thing I’ve ever finished,
and an apple may not be alive,
but it will be the first heart I’ll ever touch.
no one loves me.
d.
I have no secrets,
anyone can easily cut me deep down.
I don’t know why I do it,
why I tell everyone
every little thing about myself.
but right now my heart is breaking,
and almond eyes have never
looked so inviting,
neither has an ivory smile;
picture perfect lies are all I see.
mangoes are my favourite fruit,
and I burnt my tongue so many times
I can no longer taste hot chocolate
or tomatoes.
I need an answer for everything.
e.
I have no fucking clue;
and I’m too far gone
to think about the
consequences; so
no one will ever
try to love me
because the
looks I get
crush me
worse
than
you.
f.
f is for:
fuck it all.
Author notes
and I don't even know what is going on.
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I can relate to basically this whole piece it's amazing and staight down to the core.
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I want to eat an apple right until I reach the core.
-it will be the first thing I’ve ever finished,
and an apple may not be alive,
but it will be the first heart I’ll ever touch.
no one loves me.
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i love this part it's not something i see often but its interesting and gives the reader something to think about -
the cards are out in the open
and my nail polish is staining my thumbs
different shades of purple, pink,
black and blue.
and for once, I think the bruises hurt more than the words
oh my girlie, this is beautiful,
I want to eat an apple right until I reach the core.
-it will be the first thing I’ve ever finished,
and an apple may not be alive,
but it will be the first heart I’ll ever touch.
no one loves me.
and that was heartbreaking
great metaphor
you cease to amaze me -
um.....it's interesting.....but not for younger poets. nice job though it is interesting....
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I thought I commented on this
I'm ashamed I didn't
"am I home,
home in my own thoughts?
the stars are pounding
and my temples are breaking;
the pressure is too much."
I've been there, I think I am here.
The 'e' and 'f' stanzas I like too.
But I like the 'e' one more, the way it's formatted and it's content and such.
Good in the contest darling
Shelly
xxx
♥
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I’ve already learned all of your tricks
and you can’t come up
with anything more
because I cut off
all the sleeves on your shirts.
that was such an original and truly artisitc take on an old saying. Brilliant wording there!
"Masquerade" -
and for once, I think the bruises hurt more than the words.
gorgeousss.
I have no fucking clue;
and I’m too far gone
to think about the
consequences; so
no one will ever
try to love me
because the
looks I get
crush me
worse
than
you.
I love that whole thing.
this is really beautiful
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and extremely weird lmfao
glad you liked it though.
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I think you have an excellent start here, but you should definitely review this when you're less upset. Look for spelling/grammar errors (i.e. too instead of to)as well as capitalization--readers need to be able to understand a consistency throughout your poem. Organize your thoughts and I think you will have an excellent portrayal of your emotions.
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