nothing makes you sick
like the smell of •s•i•x• •a•m• booze
and the sound of sugar-sour lies
like **i ♥love♥ you daddy**
nothing makes you hurt
like the candy-floss taste of h a t r e d
and the sound of bitter truths
like that WaSn'T! gOoD! eNoUgH!
&&of course it's not [.a.b.u.s.e.]
not a bruise on my body
only scars on my
S.
O.
U.
L.
so why
do i
still need
your love?
::remember kids::
it only
h
u
r
t
s
if you let it...
or if you don't.♥
Author notes
Name? Avalanche.Echo
I have absolutely no idea what I was doing here. None whatsoever other than the blaring "WOW THIS IS A PIECE OF CRAP" sign right in front of my face. I'm starting to get over my writer's block--I finally thought of the words to put into a half-decent poem, go me--and then I thought, "Why not make it pretty to look at?" Got bored. I should probably change it so it's got normal punctuation. But I just don't feel like it.
And the phrase "sugar-sour?" A term coined by one of my friends. Something that seems good--like "I love you" in this case--that turns out to be bad for you or that hurts. Like eating too much candy can make your stomach hurt or feel "sour."
- kids with screwed up parents or famili group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Oh Sweetie; You're so [D-I-R-T-Y] pretty. by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 23, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this, it's so true and I can really see your perspective.
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I really like this poem also!
&&of course it's not [.a.b.u.s.e.]
not a bruise on my body
only scars on my
S.
O.
U.
L.
The whole poem is good but I like this verse the best...... Great write and good luck in the contest! -
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