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If It Only

dreams held past a memory
                      where a sunset
                                finds what some lost
                                          raging within
                                                  a mired philosophy
                                                          repercussions
                                                              of a shattered past
                                      songs that take one
                                                  to places
                                                      that some care not to remember
                                                            leaving a heart
                                                                    empty
                                                                    and lonely
                                                                  only in the wanting
                                                                        ghosts that haunt
                                                              goodbyes that seem to last forever
                                                                    romances that never came to be
                                                                    leaving one wondering
                                                        if it only could have been.

Jan. 6, 2009





                                   

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  • Alexis Manley
    January 8

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    Powerful

    I find this peice to be edgie and sort out of sync with the point you're trying to make..... but then again it makes perfect sence as is and I'm not quite sure what to tell you other than it's a great peice and by far it is one of my favorites of yours. But I will say this:
    leaving a heart
    empty
    and lonely
    only in the wanting
    ghosts that haunt
    goodbyes that seem to last forever
    romances that never came to be
    leaving one wondering
    if it only could have been.

    is one of the most significant of your versus so I wouldn't change that.
    Love
    Alexis


  • heartnsoul
    January 7

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    If the word "be" standing off on its own to the left of the page is significant...I am lost to it. other than having to read that line over to follow where "be" is..... the poem is outstanding. Pokes you right in the solar plexis leaving you needing to catch your breath. And yes, the haunts of goodbye do seem to last forever. I think the trick is to get past them and move to a point where we barely feel their presence and when we do it is without that searing tinge of pain. Yet, it is easier said than done.

  • Cwm
    January 7

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    Damn! Awesome dude, the whole style and the wording was perfect in applies to my life right now, yes we wish to forget I do but we can't but it time the hurt will ease. Loved this bill, bookmarked. lol