Seven deadly sins, Lucifer cowers..
Mother Earth in cherry red lipstick,
wild sky blazened ..
stole the virginity of
pale sunshine.
Author notes
prompt: The serpent may have been subtle but Eve happened to have her high-heels on that day in the garden.
A contest entry
- Quickie! 10-20-30 by Cerulean Sunrise.
575 points, ended January 6, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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thoughts?
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sometimes your just to good at this.
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wouldent want you to get made at me lol just a joke did you like my poems i realy liked yours.
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The imagery in this poem kicks ass.
Wonderfully creative, well done indeed.
congradulations on the Silver.
Tony
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Very nice write, Becca. I really like it. The description of the earth creates a vivid picture.
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So very suggestive! I like every word of it. An excellent read! Aren't you great
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Ooh! Wow. I loved this. Great take on the prompt love and congratulations on the well deserved Silver trophy! Muah!
Best wishes,
Ylova
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wow
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A truly powerful take on the prompt, one which stands solid on its own. Nicely done, best wishes in the contest!
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vivid
imagery, you are a master with the short writes lady! this one is very bit as powerful and engaging as any other you've done..bravo!
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How the deadly sins could cower even the morning star ... short and very bittersweet to the Bible's tragic character ...
The second part is very subtle ... telling of a dark and sinister image that transpires above anything I've written ... Though mother Earth could be the representation of, well ... Earth, it could also be taken into consideration as Eve herself (taking it out of context by what you might have meant) who planted lust in utter blindness ... tapping her heels multiple times within the sense of temptation that resound with volume ...
Perfection defined by the arousing light of day ...? Beautifully smiting the coil of divinity ...
All in all darling, this is a short yet very powerful piece fitting the prompt quite marvelously in my eyes ...
Love always,
Gabriel
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