coiled subtleties entice the imbeciles,
tongue-fucking flattery's throat;
forbidden fruit yields
to stiletto kisses:
curved thorns in Adam's rib.
Author notes
"The serpent may have been subtle but Eve happened to have her high-heels on that day in the garden." -Marky's choice bits of rewritten biblical text 
I don't know what this is supposed to mean or be. Make of it what you will.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie! 10-20-30 by markgrif.
575 points, ended January 6, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwinked
"tongue fucking flattery's throat" interesting passage. Congratulations on the bronze trophy. You have been hoodwinked by a Poetic Bandit. -
beautiful! so thoughtful and well written, all short poems have there own special thing to them that just lets you swim in your own thoughts for a while... make things seem a little different about life. i love this one, very well done!
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Hoodwink!
The title of this caught me, the play on words is great and fits the poem perfectly. Your words are cutting, I love it, you really make the poem and story smack the reader in the face and force them to be changed by it. I =love= that last line, strong imagery as well as a strong idea. A powerful piece.
Well penned,
~lost
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Hoodwink!
Interesting. I actually had to really think to made this make sense. I like it though. Very different. Enjoy the comments.
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Hoodwinked!
Creative and fun! It makes its own self statement.
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Hood Wink!
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I am a little overwhelmed by your vocabulary
I feel like a little kid whose just been read a Shakespear tale because I can not completely wrap my head around this - but that is what is making me love this 
Congrats on the Bronze hun
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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"coiled subtleties entice the imbeciles" so clever! Love the whole thing. Geo
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I enjoyed the ending line. very original.
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verry.............diffrent
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Wow The title got my attention
and the poem captivated me!!!
Very clever hun
Good luck in the contest
o wait it's over --well
congrats on the shiny!!
~Pastel
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your brilliant.
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Mummy!
I like the stiletto line. Muchly. Interesting revising of the biblical text.... very interesting. I wonder if they were Diana Farrai (sp?) shoes. jk. Anyway... Good Luck with the contest. Even though it's already closed.
Loves..
Claire-Anne -
i love your authors notes..haha
great take...!
becca
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Well done and good luck to you
with this write. Thanks for sharing
it here!
Jeremy0826 -
weird!
I like it. lol -
This is awesome. The prompt did nothing for me lol!! The depth you pen in so few words is just incredible. EXCELLENT write!!! Best wishes!
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