Here within lies but the shell
of a girl who found her way home;
to those happy endings she
always so desparately sought.
Through rain she weeps for loss,
awaiting her loves to join her soon.
Author notes
Well, here it is. Possibly what I'd like my gravestone to say in the FAR off future. 
Of course it would have my full name, date of birth, and date of death. No need to post that on the Internet now is there? Besides I don't have a date of death yet! 
A contest entry
- HEADSTONE by piccola.
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cool.....
That's kinds freaky planning what you want you tombstone to say, but atlest you know what you want it to, well its a cool thing, well ya, um idk what else to say -
This is really good. There is real hope in those words. I don't know what I would want my grave stone to say. Haha most deffinetly don't know when you are going to die. That would be pretty creepy. There is this cemetery down the road from me and i found a person who has the same first name as me, the last name starts with the same letter and has the same birthday. CREEPY let me tell you. I'm just really hoping i dont die on the same day she did that would be super creepy.
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I like how positive this sounds
the hope within these words
even if this is supposed to be what's on your gravestone -
haha cute..
good thing u DONT hv an experation date yet!
wouldnt that be a bit creepy tho? i mean like knowing the exact DAY ur gonna die? -
I want something funny on my gravestone. Like that family who put an expired parking meter on their mothers gravestone. I want something that will top that.
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I don't really know what I want mine to say, although I want it to make people laugh. Maybe that old rhyme about "the worms crawl in ... or maybe just ... "still not published" LOL
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Creepily morbid, but that is beautiful. I hope I can come up with something comparably wonderful for mine! lol.
Great job on that!
~AEO~
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whoa... thats pretty awesomeful. I means is horribly creepy.. but nice in a way. I want something cool on my gavestone.. not that I'm ever going to die. Faeires don't die very easily
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Wow......I'm speechless. Powerful and...so descriptive and....I don't know. We need to start coming up with new words to describe indescribable things...if you know what I mean. XD
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Nice job, but at 15 you have a lot of living to do yet. And I'm glad there's no death date. It might be interesting for you to look at the epitaphs of some famous writers like Yeats, Shakespear and Robert Lewis Stevenson.
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very short but a very lovelly poem you did a great job as usal my favorite part was the first 2 lines keep up the great work thanks for sharing i did not have a least favorite part of this poem i loved it all
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